A well done story. I can easily see Fudge using anything he could to convict Harry. In fact, he tried that in canon.

Dumbledore's lack of concern toward Harry, excepting how he could be used as a weapon is unsurprising. Snivellus is Snivellus. I have written out similar scenes where Dumblefutz tells Harry: "You must treat Professor Snape with the respect he deserves" to which, Harry replies: "But arent those curses called unforgivable?"

Ah! Brings back (un)fond memories of my own DI's. "What's the matter, MAGGOTT! Do you miss your mommy!"

The revealed prophesy is a nice twist. So, everybody knows and don't they all think themselves stupid! Ba!

The assignment was nicelly played. Death Eaters are really, really, REALLY stupid. Also careless, unmindful of their surroundings and lazy. In other words, perfect targets. Heh heh heh heh heh!

As for the SAS, I can only think the perimeter security were also napping, or Harry wouldn't have gotten that second shot off.

The Potter nickname was just too good!

Again...as bloody usual, Dumbledore was playing Harry like a chesspiece. Why does that not surprise me?

Apparently, so will the PM, but at least he tells Harry he's going to.

And at last, with a few terse words, Dumbledore is thoroughly completely SPANKED!

An excellent work. As this is a one-shot, I cannot expect updates, however, your writing style is one ii like, so I have placed you on my 'author alerts' list, and hope to read more of your works soon. Alorkin

BTW, Loved the omake! "Next time, I won't be rushed and I'll aim higher!" SWEET!

Great story

Brilliant! I love the way Harry took charge of his own life and got himself out of a bad situation.

Good Job, keep up the good work!

Nice story, I always enjoy a good military Harry story. You cant get much better then blowing the brains out of old voldie. Good job.

well, the only thing I can say negative about 'Sniper' is that Harry didn't end up with Hermione.. that said, ignore that statement, and let me say this is a very good story, and I liked it a lot.

Dude, that was a fucking awesome story. I love stories where Harry gains his independence slowly but surely, and becomes his own man. Thanks for writing.

Brilliant story. I really like the way Harry turned out in it. And Dobby was a brilliant addition. Great work.

Great story and I hope to read more from you.

dave

This was a great one-shot and a very fun read. Draco's plight was very well done. I'm glad that you've given me another good story to add to my "Smart Muggle Stories" C2.

A few small things that bugged me (at least a little):

1) Harry's decison to conduct an unauthorized (and therefore illegal) operation/assasination. I know he has authority issues within the wizarding world, and that he'd also feels the need to do something about LV, but you built up a nice back-story about the British Army being a vehicle for Harry to mature, accept responsibility, and honor the chain of command.

2) The muggle repelling charm is powerful, but not powerful enough to defy gravity. The charm works by convincing muggles that they have someplace better to be, rathern than act as a physical barrier that would deflect the descent of a muggle wearing a parachute. Harry should have been dropped onto the DE attack zone with his team.

3) McGonagall in her private residence, rather than Hogwarts, on 4 April? Spring break?

So it's a completed story, and suggestions on changes/revisions may be unwanted, but just in case...

- If Harry's actions were unauthorized, I would have at least liked to have seen some internal remorse from him. And maybe some level of (at least attempted) reprimand (even if it's a slap on the wrist) when his actions were revealed to his muggle superior officers. The training exercise is a wonderful (intentional?) analogy. Harry went against his orders and changed his mission because his original mission had gone pear-shaped). So maybe an old-school Para officer (or the Defense Minister) should have sat in on Harry's meeting with the PM, and been chafing just like the potted Captain, only to be overruled by the PM? Just an idea.

Of course, another idea is that Harry really was on an authorized mission, as part of an even more elite unit within the Army that deals with the magical world. The Prime Minister could have had that unit formed a year previous by the Minister of Magic (an AU equivalent to Chapter 1 of HBP). But then that is starting to sound like something within my fic. ;-)

- In the BA, "Lance Corporal" is a NCO rank, meaning that Harry would have been in charge of a fire team, or Second in command of a Section. The "Platoon Staff Sgt" that came knocking on his door would more likely have been a plain "Sargeant".

- Second Paras are based in Colchester, 56 miles NE of London. While Harry could have used the tube to get to Liverpool Street Station and catch a train from there out to his barracks, it would have taken much longer than 30 minutes to do so.

- Snipers work in pairs...doesn't mean that Harry couldn't have operated alone in Diagon Alley, but his partner should have been part of Harry's backstory in the BA. This also could have been worked into the training exercise...Harry was separated from his partner during the jump, and this was another reason why the mission nature had changed and he sniped the SAS captain.

- Snipers undergo separate training courses, and must past a test to get their Sniper badge after basic training. It's likely that Harry would have first been identified/qualified as a "sharpshooter," and then recommended to attend sniper school (most attendees already have 5years of service under their belts). So rather that it being Harry's turn to be the sniper in the HALO training exercise, it's more likely that he was permanently assigned that duty as a sniper school graduate.

- A line identifying what army unit Harry originally joined might help those who would be interested in that level of detail (it sounds as if he joined the 2nd Paras right from the start). The SAS part of the story added a bit to this confusion...while it doesn't say that Harry did join the SAS, a casual reader might get that idea.

- I doubt that BA troops are allowed to take their weapons with them on leave. When Harry returns to barracks, he cleans his weapon and stows gear. That should have been noticed. A line about swapping his real rifle and kit for transfigured replicas that he had created to take their place when he was on his mission might have cleared question that up.

Again, these are nitpicky issues. I really liked the story on first (and second reads). Thanks for writing and sharing it with us.

Very good story, and surprisingly complete for a one-shot. Often short stories leave too much out and leave the reader with too many questions, but you seem to have covered all the bases.

I also love the irony there at the end, with Draco.

Thanks for writing! ~"~

Hey excellent story, really love it though I normally dont like first person type stories this one was alright! the plot was excellent!

That was OUTSTANDING! I really liked your take on this, brilliant work! Is this HBP compliant, if so, what of the Horcruxes?

It doesn't really matter, I was just curious. Keep it up!

Good one, and got Draco too! More would be cool as well.

Very good story. Hope you do a followup to it.

gunny