|Reviews for The Redemption Clause|
| Cutiesammyx101 chapter 8 . 4/20/2015
This was so amazing I'm so glad I found this! I really hope there's a sequal and if there is it's finished, cause this is really good and deserves to be fully completed. Thank you for writing this!
| BootsandCatsandDrafts chapter 1 . 3/8/2014
Wooo! Excellent dialogue! You really got Syndrome's character down!
| deets1 chapter 8 . 1/7/2014
Oh my gosh. I found the beginning to this on AO3 and then Google searched to find the rest and OH MY GOSH.
F-ING ROBERT PARR.
HOW COULD HE. WHAT.
I am so mad. I'm sorry but I guess this is just a vent because omfg I have to read the second one.
| RoseRedLily chapter 1 . 11/22/2012
I LOVE this story so much. I have come back to it multiple times. Seriously; you did such an amazing job. I'll definitely be reading some more of your work. ;D you rock!
| kaiiju chapter 8 . 1/3/2012
Thanks for the great read!
| FeralsRock chapter 8 . 7/30/2011
Oh please, OH PLEASE for the love of all that is good and holy, tell me that ther's a sequel!
| My Review Account chapter 8 . 3/4/2010
Dammit, and the "sequel" hasn't been updated in almost 2 years. . .
| SNeptune21 chapter 8 . 10/31/2009
Absolutely flawless! Don't change a thing. The style is perfect, you captured the characters effortlessly, and the plot is WIN! If I could give you an award for this story, I totally would.
D Ice-cream for a job well-done!
| snarky Beth chapter 8 . 7/24/2009
No! Thank goodness I spotted a sequel, or I'd be rioting right now, lol.
This story’s awesome, pure and simple. The emotional ride is both heart-warming and heart-clenching. I really enjoy the humor, angst and romance, it's a perfect combination. Great plot and build-up, wonderful interaction and Robin's adorable too. I LOVE this story and am off to read the sequel right now! :)
| Deritine chapter 8 . 7/24/2009
What kind of ending is that? Good gods. Not one, that's for sure. This poor computer is eyeing me warily... hopefully I was correct in remembering there is a sequel. You're putting me on a freaking roller coaster of emotions. Yowsers.
"and the health[y] paranoia that all good supers had"
"Oh please, you're be[gin]ing to sound like one of those damn heroes."
"and your daughter if you simple[y] come back on your own"
"why he got la[o]st two blocks from his apartment"
"Helen caught her daughters meeting" meaning
"My feelings for Buddy are not something that needs to be fix[ed],"
"Violet was on her feet before the words were out of her mouth. half ran down the hall and out the front door." No subject second sentence.
"Kat got out of the first one, to Violet['s] surprised[surprise] ignored Violet, and stalked across the lawn to the agents who had Buddy. "
| Deritine chapter 7 . 7/24/2009
Formatting on this chapter is fuxored. Lots of paragraphs where they have no business being.
| Deritine chapter 6 . 7/24/2009
Holy hotness Batman! Awesome, loved the bittersweet of it. Though if this turns out to be a tradgedy, I may have to do something I'll regret later. Thankfully I'm at work... hm. Or maybe not thankfully. I can probably con the Best Buy guys into giving me another lappy, but maybe not the boss... especially if the browser pops up what I was last reading! LOL!
| Deritine chapter 5 . 7/24/2009
So... erm... let me preface this with sorry! Got a bit carried away with the editing! But only because your story is so good that even these tiny hiccups in it made the mood break a bit and that really was a bummer. Because, wow, such a good story. You really need to get a better summary going. Like "Violet is captured by her old enemy, or is she? Syndrome isn't acting like he used to" Ok, that also kind of sucks, but at least it gives a hint at the plot. lol.
"I made [sure] she had breakfast first. "
"She kept a tight grip on Robin's hand though because she was worried about Robin's swimming abilities even with the calmness of the ocean and the bouncy of the built in flotation of Robin's suit[awkward]. Violet kept toying with the idea of asking Buddy to make on[e] for Jack-Jack, then mentally smacking herself because this wasn't some charming and wealth[y] guy she'd met on some mission, this was Syndrome."
"He avoided looking at her for most of the rest of the day." awkward- consider getting rid of 'most of'
"Fine anything interesting?" finD.
" covering his [her] hand over his metal fist."
"Lighten[ing] flashed across her room, making scary shadows"
"tucked the covered around her." covers
" I see she's perfect[ly] fine with you."
"Yes, I adore her but I wouldn't do that to her, I['m] not…"
| Deritine chapter 4 . 7/24/2009
""So *where* [WOULD] you rather visit Candy Cane Forest or the Chocolate Swamp?" she asked." I think you mean 'would'.
"She was abandoned Ther at that hospital like garbage…" thre not her (interesting trying to work my way through that one heh- gotta love spell-check and it's "right words")
"Violet snorted under her breath before they Robin's room" before they entered? Perhaps.
Some distracting errors in this chappie. Perhaps as was more filler you reviewed it less? ;)
| Deritine chapter 3 . 7/24/2009
Ooh... I had forgotten your mention of Xerek. Intersting. I sense a plot, and it be thickening! Nice distraction and then reference. Also great was how you described the conversation between the two of them RE: his arm.