Wait, how did he know to get to this cave? You didn't explain this and it leaves a hole in the plot. Did he smell out Mizuki's scent?

good story cant wait for update

Love this story. Awesome job!

you did really well man, keep up the good work.

aaah no more chapters oh and I DON'T LIKE THIS STORY!...I LOVE ITTT! 3 3 sooo update soon ;)

hmm...I wonder when it will be Sakura's turn ?

Hi

after reading this Fic i must admit it is a great Read

please update this ASAP

Nice fic so far

It's an alright story I guess. I hope you update soon.

This fanfic is awasome... Its only bad that I only saw the fic in this chapter and only because of it would be a pain I don't review all chapters; Although, I promisse review for now on. The fic is getting more and more intresting each chapter and You are forcing Orochimaru use all of his resourses... He must not be happy at all... How funny... The last coment of mine would be about Naruto's Harem... It's preatty impressive the fact that you are putting every good girl in Naruto's Harem (Even Anko in apear to be intrested and I like and aprove the ideia - of course) But some bussiness are um finished (like Ino's case or Yakumo... It's not perfectly clear), some girls are not well developed (like Hinata, Temari and Haku), some aren't getting any atention at all (like Sakura, Kin, Ami, Matsuri and Sari - I don't even know if they are in the great plot but Sakura was important in Naruto's previous life he can't just forgot her and Matsuri has a filler on her on, I even think that she could start a relationship with Gaara or Kankurou in the option of she'll be kept out of Narutos's harem), this without tell the girls that don't are mentioned and I don't have an idea if they will be one day (like Shiho, Tayuya,and Tsubaki - Mizuki's Girlfriend!)...Well I supose an Massive Harem History with this amount of characters it's impossible to make all then play at the same time and the plot is good so no more complains... See you in the next chapter.

awesome ! x plz, update soon !

Okay, while I might have accepted as plausible Naruto getting together with Kurenai, at least once she knew he was really older, adding Kurenai to this mix makes it impossible to continue to suspend disbelief. I also don't much like the fact that your having two presumably strong women, Kushina and Tsunade happilly go along with the idea of almost forcing a woman into marriage. At the very least it was an extreme abuse of their power.

This is not bad writing, however if you must go the Naruto is destined for multiple women bit, then you should probably think about scaling it way back in future stories, or at the very least make it a difficult mountain to climb. Even in this one, there is no compelling reason for him to end up with anyone besides Hinata and Ginko. Of course, you just made up a reason for Ino, but realistically that whole plot arc could have been skipped. At any rate, I myself, would just like to see stronger women portrayed and having everyone go along with the multiple wives bit so easily just seems unrealistic... I'd much rather see say Hinata for example grow a spine and as they approach marriageable age demand and plot to be Naruto's only wife. If Ginko still needed to be married to Naruto she could easily wait until after his first wife passes away since presumably they will easily live that long.

I don't mind harem storys but when it's forced on people i find it a load of bullshit.

doin great man keep up the good work