|Reviews for Kiss The Wrestler|
| Anon chapter 4 . 10/8/2010
K I'mma try to help you out a bit here. Before I do note that my response will be riddled with grammar errors im a terrible proofreader but I think the info will help u. Firstly, Ichigo's thoughts when walking into the wrestling room are indescribably textbook example of an author putting themselves in a story under the name of a known character. Why would the cannon Ichigo have any need to get more popular and meet chicks? That whole section made me feel that that expereince and coach was likely based on a real experience.
Secondly concerning wrestling. I totally understand if you want to use this medium and quite frankly im happy to see it in a non yaoi context. However If you don't wrestle you need to do some research on the terminology and strategy behind folk and freestyle wrestling. To a non wrestler what you're doing is good for novelty value but anyone who's wrestled even a year in high school isn't going to buy your scenario. I'm going to list a few concepts now if you don't know what I'm talking about wikipedia is your freind lol. Shot,Whizzer, underhook, lateral drop, firemans carry, changing levels, inside tie, outside single leg, double leg,high crotch, cradle, leg turk, referee position, return, hip heist, sprawl crossface, spiral ride, ankle pick, breakdown, half nelson series pin, reversal, haeadlock, head and arm throw, hip toss ect. Do you see all the different tools you have available to you should you choose to use wrestling as subject matter? Now what you did was say the best wrester on a team a petite very lightweight girl btw, had apparently never had anyone attempt a shot at her legs, had no idea how to sprawl and once taken down attempted did not immediately belly down but instead opted to try to pull guard( a technique found in brazillian jiujitsu not wrestling). To me as a grappler this tells me maybe you liek the wrestlers at your school but you porobably aren't involved in it yourself. That's ok I write anruto stories and I'm certainly not a ninja lol but I do do ym research on what I write about. it lends far more authenticity to the story. I'd love to see you expand more on this kind of story but I'd advise you to research the topic a bit mroe thouroughly before writing out an action scene. Gl in the future.
| A Silver Tongue chapter 4 . 6/20/2009
i really like this fic the fighting part above all it's so funny to imagine rukia defeating ichigo, and he doing all the training for his body to get used to the hits... aw love it, nice fic :D
Glorious Jeux d'Enfants
| DanceOfTheWhiteMoon chapter 4 . 6/20/2009
god, i hope this isn't gonna be a sad ending. But i'm looking forward to the next chapter and the coming ichiruki-ness:)
| None93 chapter 4 . 6/20/2009
update soon please , liked the chapter
| Adrianna chapter 4 . 6/19/2009
So far im loveing it! So please dont stop!
| Leo Delkin chapter 4 . 6/19/2009
excellent! I love a good plot twist!
Plus, it's nice to read a story written by an author who knows the meaning of he word "proofreading" for a change!
Keep up the good work!
| Adrianna chapter 1 . 6/19/2009
Noo! dont get rid of it it sounds good so far!
| None93 chapter 3 . 6/18/2009
xD i like this story, please update soon
hope he wont win against rukia ._.
| XxXx chapter 3 . 6/18/2009
i like it, so keep writing please!
| Leo Delkin chapter 3 . 6/18/2009
...I'm reading it...
I really like the direction of the story. Ichigo getting the crap beaten out of him by Rukia, in addition to being fantastically in-character, is hilarious. Keep up the good work, and please update soon!
| 1blackcat chapter 3 . 6/18/2009
no! I'm reading! don't stop writing (although I know exactly what you mean... _ ) I'm too lazy to sign in...
but this is good stuff! really!
| Niham chapter 2 . 12/9/2007
Good. You updated. I'm glad. This was a good chapter. Please continue.
| Jigokuchoshisa chapter 2 . 12/9/2007
Hehehe! I like it a lot. Please go ahead and continue with it when you have the time cos it's getting pretty interesting.
| XxRainDownOnMeXx chapter 2 . 12/8/2007
oh nice! love it can't wait for the next chapter.
do u wrestle or have friends that wrestle?
| SHADOW DRAGON TWISTER chapter 2 . 12/8/2007
keep this story roolen )