Reviews for Temptation
Jazmin THE SPUFFY lover chapter 1 . 4/14/2013
im confused did he want jacob to have sex with her or not?
itsgrrrace chapter 1 . 8/21/2009
Good Lemon. So hot. xD And nice Author's note. xD AHAHAHAH
tre-zo chapter 1 . 6/18/2009
hmm, i dont kno exactly what to say, twas pree intense i suppose.

lol. ill never look at jacob the same ever again.

haha. i hope i wrote enough...

keep writing xImperfectlyX
dazzled01218 chapter 2 . 8/9/2008
Good story.

And it does sound like Jake more than Edward.
Dellicantica chapter 1 . 8/8/2008
um JAKE GR I LIKE STORY NOT PAIRING!
watermelonflavored chapter 2 . 5/18/2008
eww gross i hate man on man. yuck!
watermelonflavored chapter 1 . 5/18/2008
haha it goes fast but other than that is good
foreverbloodless chapter 2 . 5/16/2008
Wow i realy liked that story. and dont lisson to the *Wholes who dont know what they are talking about bella would be compleat with ether guy Edward or Jacob. thanks for writing

ForeverBloodless
Mandy chapter 1 . 5/16/2008
OMG this was AMAZING! I am team Edward but I am almost wanting Bella to be with Jacob! I love him SO much! This was amazing! I think you should put in a few more details and work on length! This was great to be your 1st~ I really think you should write more on Bella and Jake, they kinda get left outa the fanfic thing its normally bella and edward. GREAT JOB
supaman298 chapter 2 . 5/15/2008
Well, i love it. :] i think you should keep going with Jake x Bella.
MovedOver chapter 2 . 5/15/2008
ah, its just the lemon that is important, (which u did a great job at) lol.

still favs.
ben Horn chapter 1 . 5/15/2008
THAT WAS TERRIBLE!SUCKED HATED IT THAT CANT BE JACOB HE SHOULD DIE AND EDWARS SHOULD DO IT TO HER NOT JACUB
bitten-sln chapter 1 . 4/18/2008
hi! i like your story...its just that i wasnt even sure that it was edward! he was acting soo much like jacob...and when he said ''she said my name, not his'' i thought jacob was happy that she said his name and not edwards. im not sayı youre a bad writer, ur not really! its just edward was so un-edward like...too rough and not sweet...edward is soo caeing of her...he would be asking her 'are you sure you want me to go on?' or something like that...ur story is good and hot i might add, but there was character confusion...anyways keep going...
PlasticTramp chapter 1 . 4/10/2008
Hi! WOW! for a first chapter i thought it was killer. I thought it was really intriguing! Please keep writing more! i absolutely loved it!
Sorcha123 chapter 1 . 3/20/2008
well though i do think that was a good story... i think the character of edward was somehow confused with jake... i wasn't sure it was him at all! in fact it was only the last bit of her saying edward that made me think it was him! i thought all the way through it was jake! i had to read it again knowing it should be edward and that did help but then he just seemed a bit too rough... too jacob rather than the sweeter edward... sorry. i mean the story was really good! it's just that that character was a bit too agressive to fit into my own personal view of edward. i'm not saying your writing was bad! it's really good! and really hot... but it's just that he seemed not caring enough... or somehow un-edwardy... probably just me though.
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