Reviews for Thousand Shinji |
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![]() ![]() I gotta admit going to third base with a nurgulite might be one of the most disgusting imaginable |
![]() ![]() Chaos undivided baby! |
![]() ![]() Comment from the future here, this story had quite a strong start, despite showing its age at certain points. Then it choked on mid. |
![]() ![]() And now you fail... Because Chaos Undivided already fucking existed! Do you know nothing of 40?! On tip of that your deus ex for suffering was Emp being a bitch and giving reason to fuck over other humans since he is their god? And it would spite him? But he won't cause... Weak plot that makes no sense! Shinji would have for anything else but nooo here he cops out like a bitch. You killed your story have way through like I said. Weirdly I remember reading sequel as it were and it was far better. You could easily rewrite the chapter starting at the coma and fix all this even with timeskips. But at this point you gave up and did this... Why do authors wreck their own stories and then act like it was some master plan? It is bad writing... And again, laziness. |
![]() ![]() And now random super demon raping someone he sees as a mom for who knows how long -_- Oh, and random Eldar soul to bargain with, cause you got lazy with this. Course Misato is now dead so well done. This is just a pure shot show now. Look, you decided to end the story in a angst filled way but couldn't as you made Shinji too competent. So you got lazy. Super lazy even. It has at this point wrecked the story entirely. |
![]() ![]() Honestly? I skimmed the chapter. Super Shinji back and kicking Angel ass just highlights why my review was on point. |
![]() ![]() This is the worse chapter by far, it is you realizing you couldn't have angst with what you were doing to retcon things via timeskip on top of glossing over all the bad things. Why? Because you knew you couldn't explain it in story as it wouldn't make sense. Issue is this just makes you lazy an bad writing instead of just bad writing. |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Bookmark number two |
![]() ![]() ![]() Bookmark number one |
![]() ![]() ![]() so messed up story went down hill ugh |
![]() ![]() I can see how and why you chose certain Chaos Gods for the pilots. I can understand the reasonings behind it. But in some ways I can see Rei rejecting Chaos outright and perhaps becoming a Living Saint of the Emperor. |
![]() ![]() ![]() there is a question i had: what role had the T'au in all the machinations of all the gods? also, i was imagining kensuke happy to pilot a kx-139 Tau'nar supremacy armor... |
![]() ![]() I guess you were aiming for a plot twist? It just came across dumb, really, really dumb. Otherwise awesome read so far, not my normal cup of tea but damn well written. Just... Time skip, hospital, coma memory loss and potential fake explanation (cause memory loss). Just a whole chapter of "Well this is dumb". |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was glorious, everything about this story amused or awed me, God emperor Pen-Pen was particularly funny. |