Reviews for The Gambler
bjorn aleswiller chapter 9 . 9/5
I used the cursed seal... (Anko prepping to go ballistic) nothing happens to me it just makes me slightly more resistant to pain... (Anko's mind) 'well I guess I could bundle his punishment and my pleasure...'
bjorn aleswiller chapter 4 . 9/4
Maybe add gender to your summons bios...
dieyouperson chapter 3 . 8/19
Wow the lack of details or side story pieces make this a lot more shitty but if you can fix that it would be a great read.
Blitzstrahl chapter 1 . 8/17
Well it's a bit jarring, when someone's goes outside the norm, and has them become Genin at fifteen instead of twelve. At fifteen that means the academy ran for eight years. Not six.
imortal333 chapter 2 . 7/25
Seriously? You couldn't take 5 minutes to write out the fight with the demon brothers? With the way you made Naruto, there's no way it would end the same, so don't give us that, "because you know how it goes ," BS. This seemed really promising, but in just the second chapter, you've proved that you rush the story far too quickly, so I'm going to stop reading here.
Guest chapter 4 . 7/11
i vote on it
Anonymous chapter 11 . 7/3
LordATP, it's an AU...
LordAtp the Flash Terror chapter 8 . 7/1
How do you have over a thousand reviews? This story makes as much sense as Hinata cutting Naruto's dick off. How will Yugito just decide to hire Konoha to kill the people protecting her. What's next? Danzo is actually a woman that is the Shodaime's second son or Konohamaru corps defeating Kaguya and Madara in less than thirty seconds? Get a beta please...probably Kishimoto or Shakespeare!
Monster King chapter 17 . 6/23
Great story I love that you gave Naruto a family and the lack of bashing evendors if Sasuke was slightly in the beginning all in all great work
Sexy Fox Girl chapter 8 . 6/15
awesome fanfic i am going to continue it later though
Guest chapter 17 . 6/7
*finished chapter 17* clap...clap...clap...clap...clap...
BOOMBAYAH chapter 9 . 4/3
I think its the handsome blue beast of konoha ヽヽ‿)ღ‿ற
Guest chapter 9 . 3/31
You pulled this shit are you serious.
Sarcasm Dragon chapter 2 . 3/25
I'm going to stop reading here.

Your writing has promise, but it's immature and unpolished. Specifically, the style of inserting author comments is annoying (like Sakura) and the narration sounds like a teenager trying to sound cool. The narrator comments could work if this were a crack fic, but the tone takes itself too seriously to qualify for that. The attitude would be alright if it was just a characterization of Naruto, but it bleeds over into the narration as well.

Otherwise, your writing has a lot going for it in terms of style. Good luck.
Asmodeus45 chapter 10 . 3/22
Matatabi: Hiss, Hiss. I may love fire but even I will never use that crap.
Asmodeus45: love the story now if you excue me, Katon: Onidōrō!
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