Reviews for Illegitimate Love
Guest chapter 13 . 5/31
I regret reading this sad story but it did kinda have a happy ending still I’m now depressed from reading this fanfic
Guest chapter 13 . 5/14
The best naruten story ever.
Username6166 chapter 9 . 4/20
Is Tenten mentally disabled? I get that she's having a lot of mood swings and all, but she was the one forced Naruto to "abandon" her.
Ali3317 chapter 13 . 3/9
I can’t take this man. She didn’t have to die. Even if they had a happy ending it still would have had impact and good impact at that. This way my heart can’t take this after I got so emotionally attached to the characters
jellatinous chapter 12 . 3/2
I'm almost at the end of the chapter and I don't want to face the inevitablity just yet... Just what is with these popular naruto fics and tragic endings. Even canon ending isn't anything remotely tragic. And while it was great as a drama, I always feel like naruto is ooc in these things where he has the power to destroy countries yet people manage to outplay him and kill someone important.
Also, all the bizarro jutsu in the world and they can't deliver a fucking baby? These wizard ninjas bring the dead back to life on a per arc basis and suddenly a pregnant woman turns all that into moot?
jellatinous chapter 7 . 3/2
I can't believe this bizarre timeline. Maybe it's got to do with all the evil sasuke type fics I read but the guy seems to be a perfectly sane and functional human being... His choice in women needs work though
jellatinous chapter 6 . 3/2
Imagine living with your baby daddy's yandere stalker... I don't know what's worse, naruto getting beat up for no real reason, or tenten having to deal with possible nice boat scenarios at all waking hours lolol
jellatinous chapter 4 . 3/2
Way too much violence for no particular reason. Typical Naruto.
It also seems like naruto is perfectly aware of Hinata's crush but pretty much ignores it.
And this is about the previous chapter, bit sasuke is a bit too cool for comfort... I guess? Dude goes missing nin for years and after getting dragged back, he's a calm and collected uchiha head and completely reciprocates sakura's feelings... What?
SuperSonic2654 chapter 7 . 12/18/2020
The rambling about Tenten was biased on my part especially when you look at the summary for the story because at the end of the day the ending made sense and I’m glad you didn’t just give Naruto nothing and have him be depressed
SuperSonic2654 chapter 1 . 12/18/2020

I know I’m rambling at this point about Tentens demise but I feel like in this sort of story characters deaths like that feel out of place. I know not every story is gonna have heroic character deaths and Tentens fate makes this story more memorable and it adds to the shock factor plus that premise itself isn’t exactly the most unique so having something like that happening makes it one to remember. And I’m glad you didn’t feel the need to make Naruto just depressed you gave him a silver lining with his daughter so the ending was bittersweet. But I feel like you should have made 2 different endings having her surviving being the alternate one at least give the audience some fan service but it’s your story so you’re really not entitled to do anything. Good story
SuperSonic2654 chapter 1 . 12/18/2020
This story is good. Not great but pretty damn good


First off I gotta say it took some real balls to do what you did to Tenten and although I feel like the bittersweet ending to this story did feel sorta forced it was a good ending nonetheless.

I also liked how you didn’t leave any loose ends like a lot of other stories on this app tend to do, it makes the bittersweet ending all the better knowing that everything was wrapped up in the end

But there are somethings wrong with this story like the characters. Don’t get me wrong not all of them are bad, Sasuke was a good character I liked him, it was just a select few mainly Neji, Lee and Tenten (Tenten being at the beginning of the story). Neji and Lee were both really irrational and didn’t even try to reason with Naruto and are overall just really unlikeable throughout most of the story. Tenten would force Naruto into things, have random mood swings for no reason and would get offended because he simply worried about her. She had her reasons and I understand and she grew and I do like her character but the main problem was she always played the victim and Naruto would get blamed for everything even when he made the slightest mistake.

Overall the story has its issues but the story was well paced and the loose ends were wrapped up nicely and although Tenten’s fate was sad and wasn’t really necessary (although I may be being biased because I don’t think she deserves that) it was a good ending to a good story
Haircarekit chapter 13 . 12/7/2020
Wtf dude, tented didn't deserve that
ankur2005 chapter 13 . 10/9/2020
Great story! I really loved it! And ending was super awesome! Keep up with the food work Jetslinger
ankur2005 chapter 13 . 10/9/2020
Great story! I really loved it! And ending was super awesome! Keep up with the food work Jetslinger
Uncle Dork chapter 13 . 10/8/2020
AHHHHHHHH, I haven't like this since Clannad. For real though this is 100% in my top three fears for life, having my wife die giving birth to my child it would break me as a person. But I digress it was a nice story
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