|Reviews for Cold Winter|
| Chris LaFey chapter 1 . 8/29/2009
AHA HA HA ha ha ha . . . this was really more amusing than cute or sweet. I think I do prefer humor to fluffiness, after all.
Um . . . right. You may want to edit this certain line:
"He suddenly jumped on Eriol and gave him that kiss which was suspended earlier."
Thanks for the story.
| Emiko Alluriana chapter 1 . 1/16/2008
wow that was intense omg a lil perverted but it was hella good!
| KiKi Hayashi chapter 1 . 12/31/2007
My! You have a lovely way with words! (is in love with your style of writing)
| Mysterious Sapphire Butterfly chapter 1 . 12/30/2007
um...Eriol's a bit OOC in the end...
but i Love ur story!
| cheng chapter 1 . 12/28/2007
| Frosted BlossomZ chapter 1 . 12/27/2007
Bahahaha! I thought Touya was going to kill Syaoran for 'swapping saliva' with his sister. LOL Keep up the great work! Quite an entertaining read ]
| Convoy Butterfly chapter 1 . 12/23/2007
"with all the intelligence of a 13 years old wizard he left his gloves in England"
Oh, yeah. Reincarnation of a countless-years-old wizard who planned out a major part of his next life before his death, planned out challenges for Sakura without getting anyone hurt, created two Guardians, and he can't remember his gloves. No, I don't think so. Kaho, maybe; Eriol, no. And he's not 13; he's Fujitaka's age, and he kept himself from aging so he could hide in Sakura's class when the time came.
"It was also cold during the day he left. Not a word to Sakura, to Lee, or to anyone. Not even to her."
Uh, what the hell? Did you even read the manga or watch the anime? Eriol left on a pleasant day, with plenty of warning. Sakura and Tomoyo even saw him and his family off. And of course he told his "special person" Kaho; she was coming with him, and it was even when they admitted their feelings.
"Tomoeda’s landmark- The Baptist Mall."
Mm, pretty sure that's Tsukimine Shrine. You know, the place with the exceptionally powerful cherry tree, where one of the two major arcs ended? It's also a Shinto shrine, because Tomoeda is predominantly Shinto/Buddhist, not Christian Baptist.
"Why was she pretending that his departure meant little to him?"
Because it didn't? Tomoyo never cared much about Eriol, except to ensure that he didn't mean any harm towards Sakura. They were never any closer than casual friends, and Tomoyo seemed more than satisfied to write to him. Sakura was the one upset by him leaving.
"Perhaps her powers are getting stronger and stronger, just as Kaho has predicted."
CLOW predicted that. Not Kaho. You drop her name once, and can't even manage to get her role and predictions right.
"A huge amount of breath was force into her lungs as she gasped, utterly surprise. She felt something soft pressed against her neck and it was traveling up and down, as if making a thorough survey of her smooth skin.
And it was none other than Eriol’s tiny nose."
Ew. Tomoyo is THIRTEEN, Eriol is literally old enough to be her father, they didn't have anything between them a year ago, and he's already onto foreplay? Come to think of it, even if he were a child, this would still be disturbing.
"It felt nice, and it’s not every day you’d have a blue haired beauty cuddling you."
...and pity it isn't Sakura, is what Tomoyo would be thinking, if she were at all IC. Except she wouldn't be so manipulative to play loli for a not-close friend while fantasizing that he was her best friend who is unfortunately clueless and not interested.
"Syaoran gave him a playful hit.
“Score there pal! Hehe!”"
Oh, I get it, this is bizarro!Tomoeda! Only in a very crazy alternate universe where nothing makes sense would Syaoran show anything other than hostility towards Eriol.
Final assessment: This is completely OOC, and even if it weren't CCS fanfiction, it would be disturbing for the underage foreplay. But since it is CCS fanfiction, then there's another huge gaping problem, namely Eriol's Guardians, aka his children. Is Eriol a deadbeat dad now, too? Did he abandon them to enjoy his lolicon obsession? He really should've stayed with Kaho; not only is she not jailbait, she's very understanding of his relationship with his Guardians, there was no need for him to abandon them to be with her.