Reviews for My first Love
Elven at Heart chapter 4 . 3/3/2008
This is an interesting story so far... Hope to see some more ideas come out soon.

Elven at Heart
MyLion.MyLamb chapter 3 . 1/5/2008
great chap
Nicole Kathrine chapter 3 . 1/1/2008
update!
ToAlwaysBeMe chapter 3 . 12/27/2007
ok, i'm sorry, and i'm ean, but have you even read this? a good plot line doesn't do anything for you if you can't read for the gramer and spelling erors. get a betta.
Ellowyn Mageddon chapter 2 . 12/27/2007
I think the storyline is good but you repeat yourself a lot and there were lots and lots of spelling errors.

Try to capitalize the I's too.

I'm really not trying to be mean, just helpful.
Edward's Cupcake chapter 2 . 12/27/2007
I like this, but don't put the convo in italics! Also, you have some spelling errors. Maybe if you read it about 10-15 min after writing it, you should catch most of them! This isn't a flame, just a suggestion. :P
xXxshort.retardxXx chapter 2 . 12/27/2007
nice spelling but don't worry i do it too

good story i like how u did the time difference too

keep going

B2
DelsGirl chapter 2 . 12/27/2007
Yeah, um the story is good and all but your grammer and spelling could use a little work. I was kind of confused in the first chapter because you were going from first person to third person and back so it was slightly hard to follow.
MyLion.MyLamb chapter 1 . 12/27/2007
i like the story...update soon
PolarRose chapter 2 . 12/27/2007
I like it so far.
HappyPlacesInMyHeart chapter 2 . 12/27/2007
Are they human in this story? But it is a good story so far!
vampirelover2007 chapter 2 . 12/27/2007
this story is awesome. but 1 question... r the Cullens still vampires in this story?
Funkette chapter 2 . 12/27/2007
you should consider getting a beta. :] if you want to improve the grammar and spelling in your chapters. a beta is someone who checks and corrects your work before you post it on here, basically. I haven't ever used one myself, but you should (and no i'm not insulting your work) but anyways update soon.

Savy
Funkette chapter 1 . 12/27/2007
a little confused... but its a good story :]
bigXxdreamer chapter 2 . 12/26/2007
Heres one of the twenty.;..lol
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