|Reviews for The curse of flesh|
| Ino Death chapter 9 . 1/27
When you say whitey-chan are you referring as to what Momo calls Toshiro in the subbed version? Shiro-chan? If you are the reason she calls him this is because Shiro is short for Toshiro. :) ((yes even if it means White) this coming along very nicely.
| Itakyuurocks chapter 10 . 7/6/2013
i was following at first but then i got completly lost. sorry
| xXTheBlackFoxXx chapter 14 . 1/26/2013
I really liked to the story over all and the little side notes about your life. :D
| Ka chapter 2 . 12/7/2012
... Evil magic mindcontrol
| JelloXGiggles chapter 12 . 8/17/2012
ok, frist of all, its spelled GRIMMJOW! i really have a lot to say about this story so im just gonna make a list:
1. lots of grammar problems
2. your organization of the story is a bit shaky
3. Major OOCness sometimes
4. there are a lot of repetitiveness and it gets boring sometimes. ex: the blood being the lubricant. it kinda gets said wayy too much.
5. you shouldnt have stuck some sex in at any chance possible, this also goes back to the organization thing too i guess. take it easy and focus more on your grammar and plot. the plot itself is good i guess, but you kind of ruined it with all the random sex and weirdness with the characters.
6. i dont really understand why Gin would collect the blood of the Arrancar and Aizen when what her wanted was Toshiro.
nicknames are really bad, this goes back to the repititiveness too. ex: fox shinigami and ice shinigami. they get used a lot and gets annoying. and Gin's face/smile is actually more close to a japanese mythological creature that is somewhat based on a fox. and you cant really call him the 'fox shinigami' when his shinigami abilities aren't even close to a fox. and with toshiro, his abilities are with ice, but you cant really call him the ice shinigami, cause Rukia's abilities are with ice too. and what's with the whole preteen thing?! just because he's short doesnt mean he's a 'preteen' and you really cant compare shinigami's age to a human's.
overall i like the plot, but you really butchered it. at the beginning it was ok, so i kept reading, despite the mispelling of grimmjow's name and grammar problems. i hoped that it would've gotten better and that you wouldve realized that you spelled it wrong and changed it. but you didnt, so i just ignored and kept reading. but the whole plot really got off course sometimes with all the random sex. and then it got really weird and somewhat bad with the weird way you're using the characters. and then i couldnt take it anymore; with the misspelling of grimmjow's name, and the OOCness, and the totally random sex, then the repetitiveness. it just really got to me and irritated me. that it why i am reviewing here instead of at the end, cause i just cant read anymore.
| JelloXGiggles chapter 2 . 8/16/2012
| JelloXGiggles chapter 1 . 8/16/2012
...i hope that the grammar improves. and that Grimmjaw will be spelled Grimmjow
| xxangelbitexx chapter 1 . 7/21/2012
| Chey chapter 10 . 7/20/2012
um how come kenpachi isn't like hurt without kira in hueco mundo with him? Love it so far though.
| X chapter 14 . 6/4/2012
Haha, i laughed so hard when Hitsugaya tried to save his teddy bear from the sex scene :D (luv ur sence of humor)
| D3ATHR0SE chapter 12 . 6/3/2012
I luv Ishida, he's so cute!
| D3ATHR0SE chapter 11 . 6/3/2012
Poor Ishida, becoming a test subject...IshixSzay mite be a good combo tho...:D
| D3ATHR0SE chapter 8 . 6/3/2012
Haha i luv Halibel :D
| D3ATHR0SE chapter 5 . 6/1/2012
I'm laughin so fuckin' hard rite now, i'm cryin'! :D Luv this chapter...lol
| clobojojo chapter 3 . 4/5/2012
O.o to the last part... But hey I hope Ichi remembers SOME OF the night! Otherwise it's going to be a ruff morning... (again)