|Reviews for Longing Remembrance|
| wildcookie13 chapter 6 . 5/4/2009
u r PWNSOME! that wuz really cool :)
| Beccalily chapter 6 . 3/4/2008
I would have...
if it wasn't for the fact you've already wrote it XD
an amazing fic and loverly welcome to anything but hpfandom...
what a strange world of fiction for other books
but you definatly did this one justice!
| Beccalily chapter 5 . 3/4/2008
*dances round like a loon*
another amazing chapter well done!
| Beccalily chapter 4 . 3/4/2008
i'm really curious about this double plot
like how artemis contacted foaly
and whats going on
well done on another brilliently written chapter!
| Beccalily chapter 3 . 3/4/2008
ah dearest opal is back among the people?
and i loved the rape line!
you can't rape the willing afterall! XD
another fantastic chapter!
sorry if this isn't what normally goes on at fanfiction...there's this little note saying i should give well rounded 'critique'
thats a damn pooper, as i can't find a fault to correct...
| Beccalily chapter 2 . 3/4/2008
tad confused about what the bait was?
loved the way this is panning out!
| Beccalily chapter 1 . 3/4/2008
*bows and grovels!*
*looks around at other reviewers*
ge, tough crowd over here at fanfiction...
sorry, im new to fanfiction but i finally found a holly/artemis i think it's amazing!
well written and great potential!
| fenixfether chapter 6 . 1/7/2008
I absolutely LOVE this story!
I really think you should write a sequel, even though there is not much of a plot left, you still could make it one of those ultra fluffy plotless ones (I tend to like those)
| Insert-Smiley-Face chapter 6 . 1/6/2008
Aww, that was so cute! A/H is my favourite pairing :) I like this story! It's going into my faves :) YAY!
| seleenermparis chapter 6 . 1/5/2008
I was hoping this was your first fan fiction ever when I considered writing this review until I looked at your Author's page. Still, I will try to keep this as nice as possible because I want this review to be as constructive as possible.
The story was way too short for the plot intended. There was absolutely no detail and I find it rather hard that Artemis would become goth. It's just too out of character for him especially since it was such a dramatic change over such a small period of time (for the reader especially). It was almost as if you were trying to put yourself into Artemis' shoes rather than allowing Artemis' character to develop into what you were trying to get him to.
Now do I think you're a terrible writer? Absolutely not, just rather young (I am not going to say you're inexperienced because obviously you have been writing). However, I am going to take an educated guess at your age being in middle school.
Writing is a craft that takes a lot of time and practice in order to do well in and I realized your development will not change over night. I do believe if you work on the things I suggested, you will do well.
A fellow writer,
| Fayt Linegod chapter 6 . 1/4/2008
Satisfying that he would end with a Concert. ;D That's the best thing. Tell me if you write anything more with regards to music and the like. You capture the dynamics between Artemis and Holly quite well. Congratulations. once again ;) I like the name Nickolas, especially spelt that way.
| Fayt Linegod chapter 5 . 1/4/2008
oh yeah make an epilogue D lol This was short and sweet, may it endure somewhat longer !
| Fayt Linegod chapter 3 . 1/4/2008
one thing first:
“Now, now, Holly, you know raping the Mud People isn’t permitted.”
Now then. I really like this story so far hehe, and I especially like the way artemis look now . ' yaay! so until next time. byebye .
| Epitome of Randomness chapter 1 . 1/4/2008
Is this a oneshot, because that would be a good ending. I'm serious. This story is too abrupt, with no real descriptions to be a long fic. If it's a oneshot, loved it. If its a fic, I'll keep an eye on it...