|Reviews for Travelling Incognito|
| ilko chapter 1 . 6/26/2016
This is an incredibly compelling and heartbreaking character study of Ed, all the more because it isn't quite right-Hatha sees a lot, but her observations are unavoidably colored by her preconceptions, what she thinks she knows, and what she cannot possibly know, and those omissions are the very heart of who we (having the full story) know Ed is. It hurts to see him so misrepresented, maybe even more than it does to see him beaten and humiliated and unthanked, and that's what makes this fic a small masterpiece of human drama instead of an easy sappy hero-of-the-people skit. It's brilliant. YOU'RE brilliant. Gah.
| TheEdifier chapter 1 . 4/26/2016
This story is excellent. I rarely appreciate reading from an outsider's POV, but it was perfectly used here. I love the characterization, it's absolutely spot on.
The last few paragraphs fit so well, it's somewhat bittersweet, but adds even more to further explore the characterization (you really conveyed a lot in a relatively short story). Ed worked so hard to free them, going through pain and being treated so harshly, and isn't even appreciated (at first response at least). All he does in response to that is a burst of loud and angry words (no surprise there) and he leaves. He didn't do this for the fame or appreciation, he did it to help them. And he'll continue to help people even when he has experience with the type of response he'll get. That's how I perceived it at least. Again, the ending really fit well.
I have re-read and enjoyed this story many times. Thank you for the hard work you put into it, it is greatly appreciated.
| LeChick chapter 1 . 3/6/2016
God this is amazing. You are one of the few writers on this site that knows how to create and use oc's without the fic devolving into an ooc, mary-sue mess.
| BigChillFreak chapter 1 . 3/4/2016
Why do I have a feelimg Al probably had to restrain his brother when mustang asks how much he was sold for XD
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/26/2015
definitely a part of my 'personal cannon' Awesome story, thanks for taking the time to write it and post it on here :D
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/6/2015
| DragonDamsel chapter 1 . 5/25/2015
"Mediocrity knows nothing higher than itself..." is a quote that keep resounding in my mind as I read this masterpiece. Before this story, I always associated this Sherlock Holmes quote with Detective Conan fandom, but now I'll be thinking of Ed every time I come across the quote again.
"The child she's eaten and slept beside these last few weeks, shown the ropes in Hanvers' mines, and slapped on multiple occasions for being mouthy or stupid. She cannot see him as her equal, and she refuses to see him as her better."
Maybe that's why this bit is my favorite of this whole fic. A big part of Edward Elric life story come down to this, doesn't it? People just doesn't see him.
I like that your OC is realistic. Angry, jaded and bitter with not a bad heart, but not those pure and so good type. She does give a damn, but she doesn't has enough in her to understand. At least, not until it's too late and I just know that she will feel that bitter tang of regret for the rest of her days.
"A child that endured beatings and deprivation and ridicule because the government told him to come free them, and he did."
It wouldn't be a bad memory, per se. Yet, the fact that this whole thing is not their win, that she finally acknowledge it as such is a hard lesson to swallow.
| luluhrh chapter 1 . 10/26/2014
Oh dear Truth, this is beautiful. You are an incredible amazing genius, obviously. It's... I'm... speechless. Goddammit, I'm speechless... *scowl* your fault. Hmph.
Still... it is very amaze. I love it.
| mamita chapter 1 . 5/29/2014
Hello, I loved your fic, I love RoyxEd partner, especially because I love Ed, but sometimes it's silly, and Roy is even more silly and perverted before, I hope you do more fics of them sigeu so thanks and kisses .
| DoodlingPlume chapter 1 . 3/30/2014
Just stunning! Especially the ending... Great fic!
| harusameiro chapter 1 . 2/7/2014
Huh, I didn't expect it to end so abruptly. Really interesting POV, very intriguing to see what one of Ed's escapades looks like from the other side. Even when he sacrifices for others, I can understand the old woman's gut reaction of betrayal to the military sending in a single underage alchemist when their need felt so great. Still, if his name and reputation are public knowledge, shouldn't she and the others in the town have realized the Fullmetal Alchemist was very young when they first heard a rumor that he was coming? Anyway. This makes me wish I could see the story from Ed/Al's POV to get a feel for what really went down behind the scenes.
The scene where Ed asks Hatha if she'll help, and the scene right before they meet Al and she's trying to protect him were really sweet, and it made it feel that much worse when they ended up separating on bad terms.
| FallenHope-Angel chapter 1 . 8/11/2013
Aww poor Ed no recognition and he was insulted. But at least Al and Wd are reunited.
| thequietreader chapter 1 . 8/10/2013
This is quite possibly my absolute favorite work on this site. (Also maybe on AO3, but that's soooort of pushing it, with the quality of fics you get over there. Let's compromise with top five.)
To start off, you have perfect grammar (sounds trite but is actually an achievement in this day and age), a well-developed OC with gorgeous, flawless voice, a well-developed microcosm and exciting plot. That's just the bare bones, though.
To compound it, this story is full of such emotion; the exhausted, low-burning anger at the beginning, the rising engagement as the action rises, the sharp, penting-up feeling and genuine empathy that builds between Ed and Hatha, and then the unwarranted betrayal at the end - only to finish, at the very last second, with a shocking realization that this is how she's saved. By a child, apparently too young and immature to do anything substantial; and by a hero who "endured beatings and deprivation and ridicule because [he came to free them]".
It's a fascinating perspective on the (much-used, rarely-explored) idea of a child hero, one that makes me feel gutturally and one that makes me think and imagine. (As Fullmetal Alchemist and its fellow fandoms prove, the best type of work is one that doesn't just cause passive absorption, but inspires actual thought.)
...Big words aside, I simply love this story. Somehow, until now I never favorited it, and I freaked out to no end when I couldn't find it on my favorites list. I kid you not: I thought it was deleted, and was so distraught that I literally posted in the forum asking if there was any way to recover a deleted fic.
When I post fangasmically gushing reviews, I always worry that I sound stalkerish. It's because I'm an overenthusiastic person, and when I love things I LOVE them, but I hope you'll take it as well-meant admiration rather than creepiness.
| Res Nullius chapter 1 . 6/28/2013
This story is amazing. Magnificently written.
| 0-mirage-0 chapter 1 . 5/18/2013
Great read. Unique perspective and I was entertained the entire time! Loved cute mouthy Ed.