Reviews for The Losers
amr56 chapter 3 . 4/21
Funny and kind of sad. I find Hinata in this story intriguing. They're all complex, especially for such a short story. Thanks for sharing!
Yukino-chan chapter 3 . 5/19/2013
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SomebodyLost chapter 3 . 3/2/2013
Ahaha! The structure of the narrative is full of win! Kakashi was a complete bastard too.

This fic has plenty of potential , although yeah, I really can't see this team 7 as non shinobi . Maybe another sensei? Hiashi would raise hell, the council wanted the last Uchiha as a soldier , and Sarutobi would still support Naruto.

Anyhoo, keep this up!
always-kh chapter 3 . 11/10/2011
I like the story a lot i suppose this is another of your completely divergent AU's. i mean it's hinted that they're not going to become a team but well something has to change i'm sure... what would they do if not ninja? and i can't imagine naruto defeated.

and i think sasuke would just defect straight away or try to if he was failed.

i hope this gets continued! nice use of humor and mixing past and present.
OCQueen chapter 3 . 1/22/2009

That was for Kakashi being evil.


That was for the story being awesome so far, and having he potential to become even more so!
RakeeshJ4 chapter 3 . 5/26/2008
Interesting story! I like the structure of it, where they're writing a book about themselves. Excellent cliffhanger. I look forward with pleasure to the next installment:)
swabloo chapter 3 . 3/25/2008
I cracked up laughing! I love the way this story has so far been written, and i'd love to see how it continues.
BitterSweet27 chapter 3 . 2/17/2008
This is a great story! I can't wait to see where it goes from here. I hope the next chapter comes out soon!
Sakyri chapter 3 . 2/17/2008
Very funny story you're writing. I love the random interjections of after-the-fact comments. Great style, very entertaining.
kiwi wiki chapter 2 . 2/14/2008
I think I tried to review once when I didn't have an account, and was told you don't accept anonymous reviews... Well, now I can review! (if you still aren't accepting anonymous)

Anyway, this is such an interesting idea! I really enjoy the way you've written this so far and the reactions/interactions between all of them. Actually, I love your description the most. But while it was the thing that really drew me in, the style and content was what kept me interested. I think I grinned through the whole chapter, but especially got a kick out of these lines:

Sasuke smiled—

Seriously, you smiled?

I thought about the action of smiling. It’s close enough.

Pretty cute. Anyway, nice job!
ellwing chapter 2 . 1/20/2008
here i am, sitting in my room, all by my lonesome...



laughing my ass off.

it really wouldn't be that much of a problem if it wasn't approximately one in the morning and i really don't want to wake up the rest of the family, it would not bode well for my safety.

Sasuke, Naruto, and Hinata's comments did me in.

anyhoodles...yes, i did just use anyhoodles...keep writing because it puts me in a jolly-good mood, mm-quite... never mind me as i slip into a British accent (i'm totally American)

Good lord, i need sleep. oh! did you know that the best way to legally hallucinate is to go without sleep for 48 hours?

Is it too late to plead insanity?


EverPlotting chapter 2 . 1/19/2008
This seems like a pretty cool story, plus, its well written (bonus points for use of the word 'auspicious'). What I don't understand, however, is the interjections of Naruto, Hinata, and Sasuke; is it written commentary that was included in the publication of the book, or is it supposed to be that the story is being (literally) told by the specified narrator and the others are simply interputing? Does it matter at all? They're a cool aspect of the story regardless.

Seriously though...let me know the answer. I'm curious.

neosildrake chapter 2 . 1/17/2008
O.O what exactly did Iruka tell them about perverts? Poor Kakashi... I bet he will habe his hands full with these three and wouldn't it be funny if he tried to pull out his porn at the bell-test and Iruka poofs in to kick him and blast the book? (What if everytime he tries to read Icha Icha while with his students they scream pervert and Iruka poofs in )

The confontation between sasuke and Neji was hillarious. At least it seems that Sasuke isn't a totol ass in this story. Sounds more like someone who appreciates a good prank. Too bad for Konoha that he's on a team with the village's biggest prankster.
Dayxxdreamer chapter 1 . 1/6/2008
Im very interested in your story, I cant wait to read more please continue and update soon
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