Damn. I would’ve thought the paper would said Harry Potter.

How did Harry get passed the name. Like the letter wouldn’t been addressed to Harry not Mark Twist.

The last chapters Harry become a puppet I mean he can murder some healers to escape but noooooo it doesn't make sense I mean Dumbledore wants to make up to Harry then he just dump him to Snape what the fuuuck

Sad really, there you have a young man who should destroy his jailers, should not forgive or forget. But just like the spineless puppet he is, malleable and weak, he submits. After having a very good, strong story it is now becoming a story that glorifies weakness and submitting without reason.

Ok, this simply is the best Voldemort vs. Harry scene I have read in years.

Your writing is very pleasant, and part 1 of your story was great. An all-around brilliant fanfic. Then part 2 happened, and i think the idea was good. But you went all the way with the indenture concept, and the ship just sank.
Mind Shields and all can't solve everything or no decent wizard would ever get corrupted by the dark side or fail at anything.. Even the strongest may need help, and people may not realize themselves when they do need help. A 2nd part focused on healing, makes total sense and I was looking forward to it. That it would be a struggle, and that Harry would not easily be willing to reconnect or get help isn't surprising. Dumbledore and the Ministry trying the highhanded approach isn't a shocker. But it shouldn't work.
1/ Mental issues can't be forcefully healed. Psychological issues require the patient's cooperation. Convincing someone to help themselves or to accept help is the most basic step. Even if the legilimency treatment works against his will to take away his pain, at best it should leave apathetic to everything.
2/ So far his independence was in his bones, and his strong will his strongest trait. A stronger will than Voldemort. He has shown a slytheryn side. And suddenly he just accepts it all and becomes everyone's pathetic little bitch, with the occasional whining as his strongest form of protest? Sure he is crumbling inside, but if it's to the point of losing who he is, he might as well let himself die, or struggle to the death. He certainly seems willing to, before the slavery. If he can't (which we're clearly shown that the indenture has its limits, but his inner slytherin vanished too), there should be a reckoning when he comes back to himself.

Basically I felt that you lost your character by forcing him into a plot you had planned that the character couldn't fit into while staying true to himself.
Either that indenture should be a failed attempt or short term measure that would lead to another type of treatment. Insisting in that direction should more permanently break already fractured relationships, and either Harry will find a way to run and possibly find help elsewhere, or it would end in tragedy without finding help or by failing to fight off the overbearing wizarding world, but being more than willing to die trying.

Well, I read a couple of select chapters to get a feel for whether or not my emotions would allow me to handle reading this story, I’m thinking that I my emotions probably will not like it. Plus, it rubbed me the wrong way when Ginny and Ron ran to Snape after Harry was confronted with the Dursleys because he would be able to “order” Harry to talk due to the indenture, which tells me that I probably wont like this version of Ginny, so a Hinny pairing in this story would probably make me mad. That’s not to say that the chapters that I read were not well written, because they were, it was just the content/storyline that my emotions were not going to be able to handle at this point in time.

Wow. Good thing Harry grew up and realized he needed to forgive all the racist, mind raping adults. He never would have been able to get over his trauma without being hunted down and enslaved against his will.

Truly and without a doubt this is the worst fiction I have ever read. Not grammar wise or for continuity, but for the slavery they enter Harry into and in the end he his happy to have been controlled by the man who is responsible for his parents deaths. this is toxic beyond belief and I regret how much of it I read.

the premise that you'd force a person to do this... this is tantamount to rape .. of a minor nor less... this sickens me and turns my stomach. mental illness and forcing treatment has a limit... thankfully we don't have the ability to go into someones mind and restructure them... I am disappointed in the turn this fanfic took

Alright, story dropped. WHAT, THE. FUCK. is wrong with you that you consider this to be a valid thing people can do?! It's slavery, plain and simple. This is disgusting, and I refuse to read it anymore. It's an abuse of trust, forced situations, and honestly I am sickened even reading this. It's wrong on so many levels it's inexcusable!

I was not expecting this epic read. wonderful. thank you.

LOVE THIS STORY! Thanks for an original plot line and I am eager to see where you go with this.

same as canon ...would have loved if author gave more of her creativity in it

OMG, At the beginning of your story, I wasn't sure to end it. It was a bit to close to the original, and I was afraid of it being just a retelling of the book, with just little changes. But at the moment you splited the story away from the original, it started to be absolutely breath-taking.

I could feel the disapointment in humankind and I got so angry with all the people around Harry. The things you explained what harry hated about all the people, was exactly the things that made me hate the people too.
Somethimes I felt like, they are tormenting Harry. Even the death of Voldi was more human than the situation Harry was in.

And than the ending! OMG I had to cry soo much, I can't beleave it myself. But I kind of felt this splitted personality in myself.
1. In one way, the muggle world where Harry woult have had to start from the beginning and probably wouldn't have fit in it, especialy with all his pover he has. 2. Than the wisarding world, a world of people that just take take take. It's like the part where Ron was like telling Harry that he's selfish. This point of view that hasn't changed to the end. 3. The veil, one step and all the sorrows of the past, present and future would be gone. It would be so easy. But after all this fighting?

Through the whole story always the same question: Who can I trust?
Loosing all the trust to everyone to such extrem that you are not being able to trust yourself. And then again and again the question who to trust again?
Just to think about it again makes me cry.

To round it all up: I hate your story because it makes me cry, but I love your story because you wrote this story so fenomenaly, especialy like I mentioned after spliting away from the original story.

Lots of Love