Please write a sequel to this story.

When I was the dojustu name I read it a Rasangen

Interting story

godly what if

Loved it

Keeping this short.

Writing style is awful and reminiscing of a robot.

Naruto is a child, not an adult who speaks with perfect grammar. He is twelve and no matter who it is, no one can gain the vocabulary/speech/thought process of an adult in a year.

Writing contains unnecessary words. One example is seen in chapter one. “Unlike other teachers who liked to hang out in the lounge during this time of day, Iruka liked to catch up on grading his student’s homework after he ate his lunch,” as you can see this sentence is long and has way too much glue words

You could change it to this. “Unlike other teachers, Iruka preferred to grade student’s homework during lunch”

This might not pose much of a difference in one sentence, however with multiple it builds up.

It seems our author has just written the story only considering grammar, not style.

Could go on about the plot, however, that is a waste of time. (Keep in mind I haven’t read the future chapters once I have, I will alter this review)

Is meggido taken from tensura.

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uh idk what world you think this takes place in but the naruto verse doesn't have police

Tenten ou hanabi se for uma garota que você procura, mas se for yaoi talvez neji,shino,shikamaru ou gaara

Great chapter thank you for your wonderful work

Great chapter thank you for your wonderful work

Great chapter thank you for your wonderful work

Great chapter thank you for your wonderful work. And what do you think about a Naruto/Temari romance pleas

amazing just amazing