Reviews for Back to the Future Science Centre
Duncan S chapter 1 . 1/10/2008
Nice story, but maybe one or two more things of dialogue would be good. Otherwise, good beginning, a lot of action and suspense, and good climax and conclusion. 4.5/5
Anakin McFly chapter 1 . 1/8/2008
Good writing in terms of language, but as the other reviewer said, more dialogue is needed to bring some life to the story. As it is, it sounds more like a summary than anything else and is kind of dry. The reader feels disconnected from what's happening; you should focus more on the characters thoughts and reactions rather than just giving a description of what is going on.
allyk786 chapter 1 . 1/7/2008
There are quite a few concrete ways in which this story can be improved. Primarily, there is not an adequate amount of dialogue in this story. There are two quotations within the entire story, and that can cause the reader to lose interest. Also, the writer could have described more effectively in order to give the reader an idea of the appearance of a stock exchange building. By doing this, the reader is able to envision himself/herself within the actual story. Conjointly, the author could have provided a brief description on Marty’s friends. This would allow the reader to envision how realistic Marty’s friends actually look like. As well, the writer should have allowed one of Marty’s friends to accompany him on his adventure. If a character was added, it would’ve added excitement and drama towards the plot of the story. Finally, Marty should have spent a bit more time within the Science Centre, instead of rushing into 1929. One positive comment about this story is how well the story concludes itself. The story has a fascinating climax and the falling action of how the assistant is captured demonstrates an excellent conclusion. Overall, the story is well organized and it can be seen that the writer put a lot of effort into it.