I hate this setup. To see the tragic scene where she was so heartbroken at not seeing him grow up. Then nearly all the stories that have her survive being nonsensical neglect stories that don't make sense. Yet here we get a new twist making Kushina a piece of shit in this way instead.

Why? Why bother to even have her live in the story just to portray her this way on top of the usual idiocy of the village and Hiruzen?

This crap pisses me off and disgusts me.

The main problem of this story is that it is not really a crossover? It is more a fic about "What if Naruto's mother survived but after a few years abandoned him, giving him a trauma, then the Kyuubi shared powers with Naruto, he was adopted by the Hyuuga and joined Ne because he is a bit traumatized" The bleach elements are completely unnecessary and fluff more than anything. Bleach is a character-driven story, you very sporadically use Kisuke for a few lines, maybe add Isshin and Yoruichi a 2 or 3 times in 400.000 words. What is the point of the crossover really? A zanpakuto? One that is essentially the Kyuubi and without hollows or bad spirits to cleanse? This is just Naruto with a sword and with a female Kyuubi that wants to manipulate/tease the shit out of him.

Also the story usually goes nowhere, you just do circles and circles and circles without advancing anything.

This Naruto is also quite unlikeable, it lacks the charm of the original Naruto but he is not cool like Ichigo to be broody and moody. It is a understandable characterization for the bullshit you pull him trough, but just because it makes sense doesn't make it right, main characters should not be this unlikeable. For example, it makes sense for him to have a thing or two against Kakashi, but at the same time it comes as extremely petty and unlikeable, specially with a Kakashi that just wants to do right. If you had characterized Kakashi as an ass then it would at least feel justified to the reader, but as it stands, Naruto comes as an unlikeable asshole.

The only interesting character in this fic is IMHO, your female Kyuubi. It is interesting how she manipulates as gaslight the shit out of Naruto while at the same time being all tsundere about him. It makes her creepy but creepy in a interesting way.

You committed a common mistake in the release phrase of the zanpakuto btw. Those are supposed to be one word, two words max for a recently awakened shikai. Only the shikai of very old shinigami get longer over time as their shikai matures and gets stronger, this represents that as they get older their "self" changes and becomes more complex, and as such their zanpakuto does as well. For a shikai of a kid, he should have a single release phrase even if it is the Kyuubi in disguise. You need 1000 years for long release phrases.

Kushina comes back

fam I'm looking to see if this is a good read I don't care that he's using an over the shoulder sword im tryna see if this 400k word story is worth my time

Over the shoulder swords won't work unless the blade and sheath are shorter than the full arm length of the person, or the sheath is specifically made to allow the sword to be drawn from over the shoulder (watch Shaderversity's videos on back scabbords) or the sheath disappears and reappears like with Toshiro Hitsuguya.

You are a pedo

20 chapters still no development of world. did you forget a about kushina or what?just 2 or 3 chapter of small rumors,not even a scene. and you adding some pointless thing to waste the remaining space on fiction.

There is alot of mistakes but its quit minor.i hate the fact you cant add any about kushina are you going kill her off without explanation

itachi didnt kill the clan alone obito assisted him

I hope someday someone will adopt this fanfic and continue it’s legacy.

crippled evil old bastard one foot in the grave cock sucker pedo

Can't say i enjoyed the story, it's basically 95% drama and angst together it cliche mystery. While it's not badly written it's at its best medicore for a Drama story and worst a subpar Adventure Drama story. The plotlines just dont follow well and the funny bits aren't properly integrated to work.
So yeah it's not the worst i have read but I have not enjoyed it really

interesting

Wonder why lee was still a genin even though by destroying naruto who is anbu level which puts him at low anbu captain level and with another a year and a half to train before the chunin exams happens is still a genin since from what you wrote as lee before training that much with Gai was pretty weak so chunin exams lee in your words is kage level and garra is stronger than orochimaru and kid naruto is stronger than jiraiya, huh you learn something new every day.

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