|Reviews for Breaking the Boundaries|
| Facepalm chapter 11 . 5/21
This story is excellent so far... but why do you have so many flashbacks! You could get the same point across without using a flashback for something that happened only five minutes before. That's my only real complaint about this story. Grammar is good, spelling is good, and though cliches are used, they are well reasoned and logical. I'm looking forward to more chapters than the 20 you have up now, though I'm pretty sure this is a deadfic.
| Sandaime Hokage chapter 20 . 3/30
Cool fic, very well written if a bit on the slow side
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/25
you realy are a worthless one arent you? 1st chapter and i already want to murder you... do you think ill waste a moment more on this shit?... of course not you moron and to think that the 20 more chapters of pure idiocy is nothing more than torture... i weep for those idiots who do
| illuminati chapter 20 . 3/20
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| Whayle chapter 3 . 3/11
I thought it would be good but once again we're falling in the nice motherly kyuubi cliché and the overused repulsive "kit" everywhere...I'm getting tired of this.
| myulander chapter 2 . 9/29/2014
| Wolfone10 chapter 12 . 9/11/2014
I love how you start, but your are way, way, way, to FUCKING SLOW.
| Rakaan chapter 16 . 9/2/2014
Your constant flashbacks get REALLY irritating. Just tell your god damned story instead of hopping forward and backward over and over again.
| Foreman88 chapter 6 . 6/19/2014
Ok, your story is pretty good. You have a few problems though.
Too many shifts in points of view without warning the reader. When you are shifting POV every other paragraph, it makes it hard to follow anything.
In this chapter with the fight scene between Itachi and the Ne ops, it was hard to figure out who was doing what because the POV kept switching and you did not say who was using what technique.
You have no focused plot. It is all over the place. Naruto is listed as one of your main characters yet he appears only for a few paragraphs at a time. You are splitting attention between so many characters it is making it hard to keep interest.
I'll keep reading though. A lot of author's stories start off rough but turn into something amazing.
Thanks for the read either way.
| Amidamaru88 chapter 14 . 5/29/2014
- no chapter without a flashback
- heh movie references
- dude wtf? how old is Hanabi here?
| Amidamaru88 chapter 13 . 5/29/2014
- well I agree on the approuch that the biju are too strong for a magic pink eye and some wood to do anything to them, very good job on creating some dark secrets
- were the branch females refering to someone using the seal on them or rape? damn dude that would be dark... my money is on the seal
- did did you just create Hisana or bad ass Hinata from the movies early on?
- you first made it sound like Aizen wasn't a bad guy but now it looks like you're backing down on that...
- well ok that makes sense with the Hyuuga
- ah 9000 joke
| Amidamaru88 chapter 12 . 5/29/2014
- ok what the hell were you smoking when you wrote this chapter? you made arguments why Naruto with Sakura and Sasuke wouldn't work and then decided to go with it anyway, this makes the Hokage look incompetent as hell, he finds out the kids gets insulted and thinks to place him on a team with that very same person hopeing that they will bond and trust each other with their lives? bullshit! Naruto has no reason no bond with any of them, he has shown to dislike the fourth so how would he react if he found out that Kakashi was the guy's student, the Hokage is putting way to much pressure on Naruto, he expect Naruto to turn Sasuke around? the hell, he talks about creating bonds for him and DOES THE EXACT FREAKING OPPOSSET it just screams incompetence its like he wants to alienate Naruto and make him a future Orochimaru while crying about how he is doing the opposite. Heck you hinted at having him on a team with two kunoichi, swapping Ino instead as the trio formation could have a counter formed for it and then you pissed on it and whent with canon for no real reason, you showed us how bad things are for him and then decided to shove them down his throat after hinting it wouldn't happen, nope juts nope
| tobi1989 chapter 20 . 4/29/2014
please dont abandon this story.
| Jesseblackhawk chapter 20 . 4/27/2014
Why did you have to stop writing here and leave us on a cliffhanger like this
| Guest chapter 3 . 2/8/2014
I'm sorry man but it's too confusing to read it's like everytime I find a story that has potential its either way too confusing or takes too long to get started and is not enjoyable.