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Striking story, I actually felt my heart jump when Adrianna shot that poor girl, but then it was just a dream. You managed to make me really care very quickly about two characters I had only just met, I can't put my finger on what does it but its very effective. Keep it up . I look forward to seeing how Adrianna's character develops after this incident...

Your writing seems very speech based,which works well, but it would be nice if you fleshed out the descriptions a little more for us here and there but everyone has their own style, right?

An excellent first fic!

Definitely one of the most chilling and tragic stories to hit the archive. I give this one top marks, and would definitely like to see Adrianna agian.