|Reviews for Danger Magnet|
| s-david-m chapter 2 . 9/7/2012
Interesting start here, but this chapter has numerous typos. For instance, 'development' should be 'enveloped'. Sarah's declaration of friendship is a little more forward than she's likely to admit. She basically confessed to being compromised.
| MysteryLady-Tx chapter 9 . 6/23/2011
That was an AWESOME story I really liked it...Poor Chuck though...OUCH!
| Pats chapter 1 . 8/26/2009
I just finished reading your story Danger Magnet. I read Chuck vs the Sniffles earlier today and loved it. So of course I had to read other stories you wrote.
Danger Magnet was GREAT (and you probably aren't expecting to get a review from a story you wrote a year and a half ago). I loved the insane villain, poor Chuck getting beat up but handling it like he does with sarcasm and bravado, and the movie-like feel to it. The story felt like a R (or at least PG 13) rated episode of Chuck. Great job. It's hard to decide which story I liked better cause Vs Sniffles was amazing as well. Thanks for the entertainment!
| chucksara4ever chapter 9 . 7/17/2009
tight story, beleivable characters and charah what more could i ask for
| NickyR chapter 9 . 6/7/2009
Great story, with an amazing ending. Why is it though she can never tell him her true feelings out loud, he always has to be incapacitated some how.
| NickyR chapter 2 . 6/7/2009
I loved to see sarah so worried for him.
| NickyR chapter 1 . 6/7/2009
I have to agree, he is a danger magnet! This story has caught my attention and I look forward to reading the rest of the chapters.
| breezyyy chapter 9 . 6/1/2009
amazing! loved it all!
| bohoxlove chapter 9 . 4/3/2009
that was adorable. ]
i like it a lot!
the ending was so nice,
why can't they just get together on the show!
and! thanks for involving his family, a lot
of people kind of skip over them...
| londonwriting chapter 9 . 1/27/2009
Ok. yes. I am a 'Chuck-aholic'. Point taken. But man! Do you write good stories? Ok, so I know you don't technically own these characters, but you sure as hell know them pretty well! Completely consistent, throughout the whole story - excellent!
Don't even get me started on the storylines! I love how you've chosen to write them! You give us a basic Chuck plot, but with a little more Chuck/Sarah in there than we normally have - it's perfect for your stories! It's like the Santa Claus episode, when it was more focused on Chuck/Sarah - that's what your stories are like.
I said it before, but you just seem to have a knack at writing. The way you give a little bit of different people's thoughts, you know, little descriptions of everything, and a great use of adverbs (that's my favourite thing - use of adverbs, it's very important), and well-timed speech.
To be fair and give you some actual feedback, the main story wasn't too 'fluffy' but it got a little fluffy right in the last half page or so at the end, but this is a fanfic, so it's not really a bad point. Just a point.
I liked how you used Chuck as a 'danger magnet' and picked up on him saying the wrong things to make very (that would be in italics if I could do that!) bad situations into a joke via use of sarcasm/taunts.
Also, having Sarah nearly die but not because of the bullet proof vest brought back memories of The Nemesis, so that was cool.
I kind of liked Hampton's character as the bad guy, he wasn't likeable (duh!) as he was obviously the bad guy, but I liked him as the bad guy, you know?
The final thing to say, is I guess I'm sorry. I can only imagine how long this took to write, and then I go and read it in half an hour! Not to mention giving you such a short review in comparison to all that you have written. But thanks, I, again, really enjoyed reading this. D
| Ania Nicole chapter 9 . 12/21/2008
Great fic! Finally I've found a story that puts Chuck in a very perilous situation, but still keeps him in his smart ass character. Loved it!
| Red Death chapter 7 . 12/7/2008
The only point of improvement I could recommend is cleaning up some of the wrong-word problems. Where the word SOUNDS right but isn't. Some of your examples:
Threw - Through.
There - Their.
Dooshbag (which isn't a word) - Douchebag (which is actually two words, but this works just as well..
Interest - Intersect.
None of them kill the fic, but they do make the reader stop for a second and ask "What was that?" before continuing.
Good story, very entertaining. Grade: B
| Grey Fool chapter 9 . 10/15/2008
I can so see Chuck doing something like this. Great Story.
| jessclifton chapter 9 . 9/28/2008
Good story. I loved the plot and the drama you've created, but you really need to think about getting a beta. I mean no offense! You are a good writer - you just need to work on your grammar.
| jagged1 chapter 9 . 9/2/2008
This is one of my absolute favorites. The story so closely resembles the actual show itself with the right balance of action, humor, and romance. Bravo!