|Reviews for Intemperance|
| Stelra Etnae chapter 6 . 1/21/2012
This is really interesting! I hope that you will update this again soon!
| Zylan chapter 6 . 7/9/2010
, finish the story...*begs on knees*
| Zylan chapter 6 . 7/1/2010
please oh please oh pleeeeeeeease finish *begs*
| Zylan chapter 6 . 6/28/2010
Are you gonna finish the story? PLEASE FINISH IT!
| Haladflire65 chapter 2 . 1/11/2010
Interesting, I'd like to see where this goes... Keep up the good work!
| Cookie Master's Apprentice chapter 6 . 12/18/2009
Few mistakes, good storyline, and reasonable canon.
Very good. Your story is among the best in this fandom!
| terracannon876 chapter 6 . 12/18/2009
Hehe, almost a year since the story's been up D *celebrates* Thanks for the update!
I really enjoyed Greed's POV here, what with his motives and his intended relationship with the original Hughes' "possessions." Poor Mustang ... he has no one to turn to really, now.
Again, thanks for the chapter! Hope you update soon )
| EnviousPalmtree chapter 5 . 8/20/2008
This story as an interesting concept and I'm curious about what will happen next I also hope that we'll find out who it was that tried to bring Hughes back...
| nikcik chapter 5 . 6/18/2008
Wow, it's great really! It's not so easy to find a good quality fic, but i have just been incredibily lucky it seems :) Very promising story. The plot's genial and your writing style's very good and smooth-flowing. And the Roy-Ed interaction!... priceless :) Not to mention at this point curiosity is going to kill me... what happens next? Please, keep writing! :)
| Deep Space Cowgirl chapter 5 . 5/4/2008
Okay, first things first.
Let's start with the good. I love, love, LOVE your characterization. Roy and Ed, especially, seem to be spot on. I can almost hear them arguing when I read their dialogue. Good, really good characterization is so hard to find these days.
Secondly, I love what you've done with Hughes. You've overcome the temptation of simply bringing him back immortal and have addressed the fact that Homunculi are NOT the people they were created to be (no matter how much we want them to be ;_;) I also think you picked an awesome sin for keeping some of his original desires/personality traits while blending in the inherent qualities of both that specific sin and the homunculus. Awesome job!
Okay, now my nitipcs... and I really don't have anything but the occasional typo/left out word, which I do quite often myself.
| Spottedstar106 chapter 5 . 4/10/2008
Me:OH MY GOD!ROY!(Slaps homunculus Hughes in the face)NO!BAD MAES!VERY BAD MAES!GET THAT EVILNESS OUT OF YOUR SYSTEM RIGHT NOW!DON'T YOU DARE TOUCH MUSTANG!HE'S MINE!(Grabs Roy and runs off while cackling manically)
Roy:Why are all my fangirls insane?
Me:BECAUSE WE LOVE YOU AND THIS STORY!
Spottedstar, leader of windclan
| Pwyll chapter 5 . 4/10/2008
Typos are not bad, I just have one question, doesn't Hughes have yellow/amber eyes? Yeah, stupid detail, but I find myself caring about it.
Another excellent chapter, by the way. I can't wait to figure out how Roy deals with this one. Poor Roy, though, he's getting a taste of his own medicine. He's forced to learn the hard way what happens when people keep secrets from you for your "protection."
| Pwyll chapter 4 . 4/10/2008
This is my first (of probably many) homunculus-Hughes fics, and its good, I like it. I like the way you merged Hughes with Greed so that he is not completely one or the other, but both. I'm sure a lot of Hughes fans would be so tempted to create a homunculus that was just an immortal Hughes. Unfortunately, that probably couldn't happen...sigh.
Still, are we ever going to learn who created the new Greed, or is that the reason he/she went splat? I must continue. Please update soon.
| Estrella85 chapter 5 . 4/4/2008
Wow... I would never had thought of someone trying to bring Hughes back. _ Creepy and cool at the same time. Can't wait to what happens next!
| WindSoul17 chapter 5 . 3/2/2008
YOu are doing Great. I saw the who Hughes thing back in the second chapter. BUt I love where the plot is job on the character and background descriptions. Can't wait for the next chapter.