|Reviews for Your Laughter|
| Clar the Pirate chapter 1 . 1/19/2008
You turn phrases beautifully. "a certain amount of native skill" was my favourite but it's one among many. The whole is just so wonderfully modulated and alliterated - poetic prose, I s'pose (sorry).
I'm afraid I cannot understand the fourth sentence. "With the uncanny sense" sounds like he's going to combine it with something else to do some other thing but he doesn't, or does it call back to the previous sentence, somehow? And you might change the spelling of "atlernately", "prommiently" and "swen", I mean, you know, if you could be bothered. And how might missing her laughter be a reason for discernible distance?
Sorry, other than my being an easily bewildered person, I really liked this story. Beautiful job.