Reviews for Who cares
superhypercrazyasianchick chapter 1 . 1/21/2008
hola lauren!

pretty good story, but there are ISSUES! let us kill them.

1. Tohru is not spelled Tohrou.

2. Spelling issues (DAM RAT, delishous, heavnly)

3. Grammar (in Hatori's POV, it's not "Me and Yuki sat," it's Yuki and I sat.) don't blame me. blame the stupid old geezers who made the rules.

4. "eyes where only 1/2 opened."

a) word choice! it's not where, it's were

b) this is a great story, not a recipe. don't be lazy and write 1/2 when you can write something like "hooded eyelids..."

Your english is wonderful in your bio, so put some more effort in your stories! readers will appreciate and
Luka-san chapter 1 . 1/21/2008
WOW I love it!

can't wait to read the rest of it, keep up the good work :)
Love Inc chapter 1 . 1/21/2008
WOW! That was great, awesome. Please continue I really loved it, I can't wait to see where you take this! Please continue and please keep up the great work!

Please update soon, before I die of suspense!

Love, Love Inc. x
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