Reviews for Orders
SherrySummer chapter 1 . 3/27/2008
Nice piece. You described Lucien's apprehension and despair wonderfully.
Anare Silvermoon chapter 1 . 1/23/2008
Great story. You really have a talent for describing the emotional state of characters :-)I also love all your other Oblivion stories. Especially "Shadow Of A Grave"
Jordy Trent chapter 1 . 1/23/2008
Pretty good :) An interesting take on the build up to Applewatch, with Lucien knowing what's to come and yet powerless to prevent it. Nice to see him in a vulnerable moment. Shaleez is also suitably sinister. Well done :)

Only nitpick I'd want to make is that some of the sentences are a little peculiar sounding - such as this one:

"They waited in silence until his Silencer returned eyes slightly bloodshot whether from hard shed tears or from another source he did not know."

It could do with being broken up with a couple of commas and a hyphen, e.g.

""They waited in silence until his Silencer returned, eyes slightly bloodshot - whether from hard shed tears or from another source he did not know."

There's a few little things like that that need some polishing but otherwise this is well written.