|Reviews for Don't want to lose you...|
| Ravenblackdove chapter 7 . 4/11/2005
Well, it has taken me a few years to finish reading this story, reading up to the last updated chapter, waiting a while, coming back and re-reading until I finally got to read the whole thing. I guess there's something to be said about one's story when it can draw that kind of persistance, especially when I don't even really come to anymore. I came back purely for your story, and after years of reading to it's completion I feel I must leave a review on par with the caliber of such a period of time. So, I will start with the visuals. I was there. I was in the story the entire time. Everywhere you took me I had a full sense of my surroundings and the moods implied by those surroundings. In that respect, I feel you did very well to paint the picture of the Gundam AC universe without going too far into detail. With the exception of all the smiles and smirks coming from Heero, you had all of the characters nailed. There are very few Gundam fics where the characters are portrayed in such a way that I could actually believe. You did it very well. And don't misunderstand me about Heero. You did very well with him. His moods, the actions he would take, even his interactions with the other characters was right on the mark. I just never could picture him smiling in a situation like that. Zechs, or rather our eternal friend Milliardo was also written very well. There wasn't a single aspect of him in this story that I didn't like. It was just perfect in those quiet moments of pause such as looking out the window with Noin or when Heero hangs up on him and you described him as not being surprised. When you had him agree with Heero's decision to go alone, I felt that it was exactly what Zechs Merquise would do. The third very detailed person of the story, Duo, was absolutely outstanding. He made a very powerful entrance into the story. His presence throughout was solid. There was never a doubt that he was an important character to the story and held great significance. You detailed aspects of his inner thoughts, personal relationship, and emotions extremely well and even added a little with seemingly insignificant details of his past such as the short lived affair with alexa, adding volume to the reality you had created for the gundam universe of the future. I was a little upset, and even disappointed when he died in the end, however I respect your decision in that and I agree with your note at the end that he went out a hero. He exit from the story was just as powerful as his entrance. The other characters such as Noin, Quatra, Hilde, and even Trowa, though he wasn't part of the story for long, were pictured just as they should have been. The monologues of thoughts and flashbacks for Noin and Hilde were very powerful. They made me really see through their eyes and experience what they would truly be thinking and feeling at those instances. Quatra was just as kind hearted and comfortable to be around as I remember him from the series. And Trowa's quiet and to the point demeanor was also presented well. The apology for taking longer than he would have in the past, though just a small fragment in the whole story, caught my attention and was yet another compliment to the fact that things don't stay exactly as they were when time progresses. Little things like that, in moderation of course, serve to make the story more real in the minds of the readers. And as for Wufei... well I could absolutely see him pulling something that rediculous. I never did like Wufei in that his own selfish ideas of strength, integrity, and justice did, as you said, only serve him, while being nothing but destructive to everyone around him. In that respect I must thank you for killing him. Even so, I do think Wufei would have come up with something more inteligent and witty to say than "fucked up bullshit". Not to say that he wouldn't use profanity, it just didn't seem like his own particular style in that particular sentence. Other than that, using "Woman" in place of Relena's name and his reasons for doing what he did were exactly what one could come to expect from Wufei. I think Relena's dialogue could have been a little more in character but you did serve to advance the plot and bring details into light at just the right pace through her thoughts and discussions with her captor, and I must also say that you envoked her feelings for Heero and the consequences that the passing time had on those feelings very well. If I had to give constructive criticism to help you grow as a writer it would only be this: the use of the same word over and over in a short period of time gets monotonous after a while and inevitably causes the reader to notice those words in irritation later on in the story even if by that time it is no longer being used exessively. Re-read through the story with an eye out for these words and you'll see what I mean. The only one that really comes to mind right now is "back ups". Any kind of substitute of the same meaning adds variety to the vocabulary and makes the story more enjoyable. But in an end note, absolutely, possitively a fantastic and wonderful story. I enjoyed reading it very much and have included it in my extremely short list of favorites and will recommend it as fun reading to all of my friends that like Gundam Wing. Keep on writing. You can only get better from here.
| Dread chapter 7 . 8/28/2002
The whole story sucked, it could've been better if Relena were gagged!
| Lorimlowe2 chapter 7 . 8/17/2002
hey i likd i read like i said i would so yeah alright gotta go byes
| Ley chapter 7 . 5/3/2002
That was good, nice job.
| Ame chapter 7 . 4/22/2002
TOO SHORT! TOO OOC! Not enough ROMANCE or CHARATER DEVELOPMENT! not very good
| Kerrie-chan chapter 7 . 4/18/2002
*sniffle* soo sad
| Ley chapter 6 . 4/15/2002
This is good, please continue soon.
| anna chapter 6 . 4/13/2002
What a cliffhanger... continue! Great story!
| Laydee Sakura chapter 6 . 4/11/2002
Hey, that was really awesome! Please continue soon!
| EyRieya chapter 5 . 4/10/2002
hey sup you bettah finish your fanfic? well anyway ... i'lll be waiting for the next chap okay... c yah... keep up the good work!
| Sai Hikaru chapter 5 . 4/7/2002
can't stop rite now! want more, realli want to no wuts gonna happen! plz hurri wif da nxt chpt...keep on going!
| Dragon Empress chapter 5 . 4/6/2002
You've made Duo a bit of bastard, but apart from that, I like it!
| kay chapter 5 . 4/6/2002
great fic and wufei? neva wud hav guessed, please continue
| sweetangel chapter 5 . 4/5/2002
Hey you're doing a great job...get the next chapter out soon please. :)
| Hitomi chapter 2 . 3/21/2002
great so far keep puting more up ohj heero is going to get mad