Reviews for New chance |
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![]() ![]() Minato and Hiruzen are friends, and Hiruzen was Naruto's pimp. Author, fuck you. |
![]() ![]() I hope you could get these chapters beta-read. I stuck around because you gave me my favourite character, but reading is painful. |
![]() ![]() Your english is passable, but it's still pretty shit. There were many times you unnecessarily used big words and many sentences were worded like shit. |
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![]() ![]() Entertaining! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i enjoy what i have seen and read so far,as it seems to be quite balanced and enjoyable and so thank for posting such a great story |
![]() ![]() the crikmson death |
![]() ![]() ![]() so, tora is joining the akatsuki in Sasuke's place? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Jajajaja si te rifaste con ese capitulo. Me encanta mucho tu historia. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome story. Love how minato is potrayed here and enjoyable story overall. Will be waiting for when you update |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just finished reading this fic, it is a good story, please return and continue it! Thanks! |
![]() ![]() ![]() you know that the bloodline ability makes little sense at best... if the ability is activated consciously, then it couldn't work during sleep. if the ability was subconscious, it wouldn't stop if your heart stopped, but it would once your brain stopped functioning. it seems more likely that the ability comes directly from the cell, which is neither of the previous two and would act like wolverine's regeneration. this means that most, if not all, the handicaps for the ability are B.O.L.O.G.N.A. |
![]() ![]() ![]() #1 complaint, chapter length. slap 5 of these bad boys together and then it's an acceptable length. |
![]() ![]() It's a shame this story will never be finished at all. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is AU so I won't be bothered. But canonically the healing ability must have been Kushina's because of her Uzumaki vitality. There's a reason they hailed from the Village of Longevity after all. But since you want to make an OP Minato, I'll just enjoy the ride |