|Reviews for Torn Between Two|
| jbpiggy chapter 32 . 9/1/2008
I enjoyed reading this. Can't wait to see how the breaking of the seals goes. So I'm off to start the next installment. xJx
| jbpiggy chapter 27 . 8/19/2008
Enjoying the story so far. Glad the three of them are still close as Murtagh has only obeyed his oaths to his Father and the king.
I only have one thing to say about Reilyn and thats be careful what you wish for. xJx
| jbpiggy chapter 21 . 8/10/2008
Okay I have one quick question about this chapter. Would Eragon not have taken Zar'roc back or seen as Morzan was never killed did Eragon never recieve the sword from Brom?
The betrayal was good, I love the bad boy side of...well i just love bad boys.
| jbpiggy chapter 20 . 8/10/2008
I like Payne's riddle, I hope we see more of the Werecat as I think he could reveal more about the two mysterious ones.
Hopefully the people of the forest will be able to solve a few of the riddles you have set up.
The kinship with the wolf might also explain Reilyn's animalistic traits, but will he succeed in his promise to protect her?
Nice plot development, it has put a lot of questions in my mind and now you are answering some of them.
| jbpiggy chapter 16 . 8/5/2008
“What in the hell are you doing? Trying to get yourself killed? He screamed internally.” He certainly does have a death wish ;) Not many would try to seduce both a Rider’s bodyguard and the Rider too.
I wonder what the mission is?
Nicely done with the final part of this chapter, although not graphic it gets it’s point across well. xJx
| jbpiggy chapter 14 . 8/4/2008
Poor Reilyn, and if Eragon reacts this way how must Murtagh be feeling about the whole thing.
Nice chapter. xJx
| jbpiggy chapter 13 . 8/4/2008
A nice couple of chapters. Just the right mix of angst, fluff and action.
Still have more questions than answers though :D
| jbpiggy chapter 9 . 8/3/2008
The small glimpse into Reilyn’s past only adds more questions. Although I have an inkling as to who these mysterious figures are.
“Don’t you know any better than to wake a sleeping dragon?” Loved that line as you can just imagine what Saphira could do.
Must be hard to go against your instincts, like you have Reilyn, do when she binds Murtagh. Although judging by his reaction maybe the noose should have been used on his animalistic desire rather than his neck ;)
Looks like a triangle is starting to take shape now, hopefully Eragon's jealousy doesn't destroy his friendship with Reilyn, or Murtagh for that matter. Still wondering if she has some Elven blood in her but I guess to find out I will need to keep reading. xJx
| jbpiggy chapter 6 . 8/2/2008
As I continue reading my mind forms more questions that I hope will be answered. How did Murtagh arrive in such a state? Or was it the results of the animals otherwise known as his guards? Is Reilyn a dragon-less rider? Is that the reason she refuses to reveal her past? Are her abilities linked to that or is a question of genetics rather than the lottery of being chosen as a rider?
Maybe I should keep reading or the questions will just keep flowing :) xJx
| jbpiggy chapter 4 . 8/2/2008
The pain you are inflicting on Murtagh is described with great intensity. It’s making me cringe in sympathy as I read it. I just want to take him home and make him all better ;).
I also love the way you portray the inner struggles, as if the character is arguing with themselves.
Looks like Reilyn has the same values as Eragon, the willingness to sacrifice herself for the benefit of another. And yet again, poor Murtagh he does the right thing by stopping her yet lands himself in trouble for doing it.
| jbpiggy chapter 2 . 8/2/2008
Thought I’d review every few chapters rather than thirty three individual chapter reviews. I don’t think I could come up with enough different reviews, and that many “great chapters” would just look like I was spamming the review system.
Okay time for a Flash Gordon rip off…Morzan’s alive! Sorry, it was just the first thing that popped in my head.
I like Reilyn already. Even though she did capture Murtagh she sees fit to treat him with the respect and honour every human should receive. Poor Murtagh, nothing’s worse than being kicked when you’re down.
Only bad comment I have about chapter two is there’s very little Murtagh.
| jacksgirl793 chapter 32 . 5/18/2008
totally kickass, i wish it were longer.
yeah to part 2!
| black-venom-heart chapter 2 . 3/2/2008
aww! poor Murtagh1 ok so the girl is Eragon's personal guard right? just wanna clear it up. I really like this story!
| Addison Miller chapter 15 . 2/26/2008
OMG! i luv ur book. thanx to u my nails are now reduced to nubs! i didn't think id like the whole love triangle gay thing but it only makes the story that much better!
| The Daxinator chapter 4 . 2/26/2008
You've neutered the men of Eragon and Eldest—why? Why do you people seem to think that a guy can't like other guys unless he's a sissy who “sobs” at every slight amount of pain or adversity? Gay does not automatically equal becoming an emotional woman! The only ones who it does are the FLAMERS! Murtagh, a WARRIOR who Eragon in the books notes to be an “excellent and merciless fighter,” should not be sobbing like a little girl whenever he gets kicked around—broken ribs or not. Nor should Eragon sob at the thought of darling Murtagh in pain. Their penis makes testosterone, not estrogen!
And yet there is a woman—who strongly resembles little Miss Mary-Sue—that is strong and able and more manly than the both of them! But of course she's still curvy and attractive—even to GAY men, apparently—and OF COURSE is a powerful magic user. So powerful that she just astounds everyone around her with the fact that even though she's relatively unstudied in magic, she's just under a Rider's level of power. I'm sorry to be harsh, but somebody's got to be!
ALL Mary-Sue's deserve to have a hatchet applied liberally to their necks, and neutered men need to stop being paraded as men in these fics. They've had a goddamn sex-change of the mind, for pete's sake! Why not finish the process and just call them Eragonia and Murtagha!