Reviews for The Phantom
alteris chapter 2 . 3/31/2008
this chapter may have been short, but it was good. and you non-ghost person to control food, that was also a well done idea. keep up the good work!

from your menacing neighbourhood author,

alteris
Pterodactyl chapter 2 . 3/30/2008
Hello!

Constructive Criticism to the rescue! I'm going to say that I like the style of the writing but I really don't think that it fits in with what Esme has written. You just jumped into the fighting without any transition chapters at all. Like a chapter about how Danny might figure out how to acually control the powers. Like misjudging his own strengh, ect...

Behold a second point. The way that you wrote this was really rushed. Stall it some, give it some meaningless fluff. Or stuff it with scenes of preperation. Give it a time line.

Please don't think that I hate it because I don't. I love the idea that someone is continuing this after Esme dropped it. And I am determined to help said person (AKA you).

Well good luck writing this, I am willing to Beta, if you want me to.

RFYS (Read From Ya Soon)

Pterodactyl
mystery writer5775 chapter 1 . 2/2/2008
*Shivers* Oh I love it! Please continue!