Posted 11 May 2013, at the Starwarsknights web site and the Lucasforums Coruscant Entertainment Center in my The Critic's Two Cents. I was posting directly to the actual story threads, but my computer went down for the second time in six months with a virus in June of 2012. Then in November kotorfanmedia went down for reasons unknown, so I was stymied in my attempts to post the reviews. I had waited for it to revive, but you on fanfiction deserve your reviews.

KOTOR aboard Leviathan: Sequel to Fate's Saviour. With Bastila now in enemy hands, our hero has a new focus

You used memorise(work at remembering) instead of memories. No biggie, I think you just misspelled, and the spell checker (Using British rather than American English) didn't catch it.

The piece was pretty much how the scene played out, though you did add Falcon as a character, but I think Carth gave up a bit too quickly. In fact the only thing that detracted from it was having the entire first chapter underlined. At first I thought it was just memories of the escape, and expected it to go back to a standard format, but at the end of the chapter it was still underlined.

Nine chapters long, again, I didn't have the time to read them all, but it looks good so far.

nice x

Cool.

This is one of my favorite star wars stories. I liked the idea of the padawans threatening Revan, i think you should go into that a little more.

Update soon

I liked the line about Revan giving the crowd cheering for him "a strange glance". It would make me feel a bit uncomfortable too, to be rewarded for simply fixing what I'd broken.

I have a question. Did Revan get his memories back? Because in some scenes it seems like he did, such as when he kept Malak's lightsaber to have something to remember him by.

This was one of the better fics that I've read recently. You write combat scenes well, and your Revan is well-developed. I like how he achieved his power through balance; it made him believable, real, and human. Well done.

Great job. I like how you have portrayed all the characters in the story and added some depth to the main characters in the game. I also think that the combat scenes are vivid and just show how great an author you are. Most people can only have good dialog and some people can only do fight scenes. You can do both with flawless transitions between the two. Good job.

Not bad, not bad at all, good work keep it up!

I personally like this story and though it seems Revan has given a little to the dark side in his anger, it is well justified and I can see him following through with it as he did in the game, I hope you continue to write this well when the battle ends and beyond in the next chapters.

This story is cool. I like how you have a new character in Falcan and I like how Carth and Cand get on without arguing with eachother. Your portrayal of Drake/Revan is really good, I like how he has so much anger and how determined he is to save Bastila. When he meets the Sith students in Dreshdae is really cool, I like how menacing he is. When Rev gets the Heart of the Guardian is cool too. Good luck with the next chapter!

Now I'm wondering what exactly it is that Falcon knows about Revan, and who Falcon was before he became a bounty hunter.

Also, it's interesting that Drake came to the decision to be called by his real name again. A lot of writers choose to have their characters stay in perpetual denial about their past - name wise, at least - and I like that Drake decided to take a more direct route.