|Reviews for TwentyTwo Days|
| browneyedgirl893 chapter 1 . 4/2/2009
keep going pleeaase! This story is so sweet :)
| Bellaswan94 chapter 1 . 4/17/2008
Please keep going I love it!
| padfoot's prose chapter 1 . 3/17/2008
Wow! This is really good! Keep it up!
| Lemonade Ninja chapter 1 . 3/13/2008
It's interesting. Please continue! NerdyGuRu2
| SunnyDropped chapter 1 . 2/29/2008
| vjgm chapter 1 . 2/4/2008
Good start :)
| Annilaia chapter 1 . 2/4/2008
i am jealous. you got bright green eyes to review, hahaha
i really like it, the way you wrote it. is there going to be more?
| Silviael chapter 1 . 2/4/2008
Wow, you have a great writing style! I also love your characterization and how genuine it seems. The only thing I saw was that there was a lot of dialogue- maybe a little more detail, but really, it doesn't need fixing, it's just something to watch.
GREAT JOB! I can't wait to read more. :)
-Silv, Sarah, That Crazy Chick
| Simply Kiwi chapter 1 . 2/4/2008
So, I got your PM and thought I'd come and check it out.
It turns out, I'm really glad that I did. I like this a lot. You have quite a talent when it comes to writing. :]
| lilvoice1 chapter 1 . 2/3/2008
ok i would like to read some more please!
| Sammicles chapter 1 . 2/3/2008
i really like it and i hope that you continue okay i lied i don't like it...i love it so really please i was just doing that for suspence.
| Bright Green Eyes chapter 1 . 2/3/2008
I like it so far, very seductive in the writing. Watch the formality in Bella's tone it seems more suited for Edward than her. I love it, you are a very talented writer.
| eReid chapter 1 . 2/3/2008
Silly Bella. Haha, this was very cute. I liked it a lot.
and because i can't remember if this is a one-shot, i'm putting it on my alert list. If it is a one shot, then just ignore it -grins-
| monsoonkisses chapter 1 . 2/3/2008
You asked me for a review, and here it is!
I love the adjectives you used; they were very effective without being too cliche. The detail was great as well. The only thing I would say is to work on dialogue more. It's pretty good overall, but some things don't flow well and there are some errors in the constuction. Great ending, though!
| kajibot chapter 1 . 2/3/2008
Hi, I got your pm and decided to check this out; I hope this isn't over! You've got something interesting going on and should keep going with it. The only critique I have is that you should get a beta to double check some of your grammar (i.e. first paragraph: "fingers barely brushed his skin as they moved from one to the other" should be "one to another" - Edward DOES have more than one pack in his six pack, lol). Another thing I have to suggest is to read more of the dialogue between Edward and Bella in the original books. It'll give you a better sense of the nature in which Bella and Edward speak to each other.
Other than that, I think you're off to a great start! Keep writing! :)