|Reviews for The Truth Decays|
| paracuties chapter 18 . 1/11
Wow. Holy cow, but this story is really expanding. I can't wait for you to write more.
As for the rating - I think letting it remain T will be fine. Rating it T still accounts for profanity and minor gore, doesn't it? Unless you described it in a lot of detail (which you don't) I think it's totally fine!
I absolutely love this story. Everyone's super in character, and the humor has me cracking up all the time. And you definitely seem to have a plot, too - there's a lot of details, yet you still remain on the same path with your story. Some things are coming together and some are still mysterious - like that purple-eyed man, for example. I'm very, very curious. Hope you update this story soon!
| OnlineImhotep chapter 18 . 1/11
It's Madara, by the way. Not Madera.
| satoz chapter 18 . 1/11
This should probably be M with all the violence.
:) really liked this chap. thanks for updating!
D: poor Hinata! Will she get super shinobi powers or alchemy powers?
| Hendy853 chapter 18 . 1/11
I love this chapter. It's one of my favorites so far. Especially because it's finally PLOT instead of fight scenes. I'm not a huge fan of fight scenes. I recognize the necessity and I'm glad when they're well done, but for 2/3 of the updates in two years to be fight scenes was a little annoying for me. So this chapter made me very, very happy. The Sand Ninja are involved! A Homonculus who may or may not have Marcoh stuck inside him is here! Hinata saw the freaking Truth!
Can she do Alchemy now? The Homonculus seems to think she can judging by the way he/it tensed up when she clapped her hands together. Too bad about her tongue (I missed the line clarifying that the first time I read the chapter, so I thought it was her vocal chords for a while there).
I'm also really, really curious to see what Sasuke does now that he's decided not to go to Orochimaru. And I can't help but feel that there's at least one other person from FMA in the Naruto world other than the two we've seen so far. (Fingers crossed for Kimblee, Scar and Greed).
Also, I love that scene between Gai and Kakashi. That was great. I had honestly forgotten about their "contests" a long time ago, and you've reminded me in the best possible way.
And finally, I love the way you write Gaara. I've gotten so used to seeing him in Kazekage mode that seeing the intermediate stage between that and Psycho mode was really surprising. But it makes perfect sense. And it's hilarous. That one line about Temari's cat dying (in a sand coffin) is one of my favorites in the entire fic.
Keep up the good work!
| TrisakAminawn chapter 18 . 1/11
Nah, to my knowledge the M rating on ffdotnet is used mostly for softcore porn and really spine-chilling depictions of injury, body horror &c. Nothing in this fic has been that bad. Stabbing's nothing. The most nightmarish part thus far has been Lee and the spiders, and closing himself in the fridge to maybe die of poison before he can suffocate.
Though Hinata's experiences in this chapter are pretty serious. (She was *awesome*, by the way.) I wonder if Tsunade can replace or transplant tongues? Truth really is a bastard. (On the other hand, I don't believe Hyuuga Hiashi is quite so bad as he seems here.) And I am really baffled about what appears to be some alarming fusion of Pride and Greelin, with some powers neither has displayed. I guess this is the person Shinigami was talking about - and hey, Pride's very much an eater of souls, no skin off his nose - but I am defeated by your mystery. It's like...honestly it feels kind of like Father remade Pride as a human-based homunculus using Roy as the material, and taught him medical alchemy while he was at it, but that's silly.
Heh. I don't have the clearance for that. Not your standard customer at the Gates.
I love your fight scenes. Don't worry about them dragging, please. And thank you for updating!
| CeresMaria chapter 18 . 1/11
Yeah, this story would probably be better with an M rating. Lots of blood and all.
Thanks for the update.
| Guest chapter 18 . 1/11
Excellent chapter! I don't know if the stabbings are violent enough to raise the rating to M. You'd pretty much have to describe the gristle in detail to get an M. Maybe it's a hard R.
| Lightsbane1905 chapter 18 . 1/11
frankly i am just happy you updated. Kudos
| BugzAttack chapter 18 . 1/11
You have no idea how excited I am that you updated this. When I got the email alert last night I spent about a minute freaking out before I could settle down to read the chapter. And after I finished I freaked out for another hour. This is actually my second re-read of this chapter. Thank you so so much! I could kiss you right now.
Your timing couldn't have been better. I've been felling like crap the last few days since I came back home from winter break; The friend I had petsitting ended up killing all but one of my fish, and the survivor isn't doing well at all. Half his dorsal fin is somehow missing, and while he's always been the most active and curious of all my fish, he's stopped swimming and he wont eat. All he does is rest at the bottom of the tank, and I know it's just a matter of time before he dies too. For the last few days I've been watching him waste away and I've not been able to do anything about it. Since bringing him home I haven’t been able to sleep, but I went to bed happy last night for the first time in days. Getting your update made me feel a bit better. Thank you so much for this wonderful distraction and for making my day a little brighter.
You were right about this chapter being angsty, (I loved it though!) and somehow in all that angst you managed to add a lot of humor too. Like Naruto announcing that the room smelled like onions; Tsunade asking about palaces, naked bandits, and statues making obscene gestures; Tamari and Kankoro slamming the door when Naruto and Gaara started talking about eating people. (They should have said goodnight first!) xD
That line about it becoming a corpse retrieval mission to all but Naruto cut man.
Then Kakashi telling Naruto that Ed was probably dead was all pain. Naruto getting teary during his talk with Gaara got me even worse. I basically just want to give Naruto the biggest hug ever and tell him it’s going to be ok. Hinata too. I can't believe she's lost both the use of her legs and her tongue. I don't think I've even fully absorbed that yet. At least she's alive and out of her coma, but that was cruel. Poor babies. :’(
Gai and Kakashi’s interactions were really adorable. A bit of a roundabout way of taking care of a friend, but that’s what eternal rivals do. “Did you know you have brain on our foot?” I lolled. Poor Gai must feel awful though. :(
And wow! this story got dark there at the end! Mystery-purple man is Pride isn't it? At first I thought the man was Madara or Itachi. I totally blanked on the possibility of him being a homunculus until the scene with Hinata. At first I suspected Envy, but then the shadows came out and I realized he HAD to be Pride. And from the sound of it, Pride has found a new meat suit to inhabit. Is there some sort of Smegol/Gollum sort of thing going on with Selim/pride? It would explain why he had that brief personality shift and then was back to normal. (Or maybe the new body Pride took is fighting back and he lost control for a second.) Did he pick up the shinobi's language and Alchemy by eating people? It worked with the one dude and Gluttony.
While I'm absolutely terrified about where this is going now that Pride's in the game, I can't help but feel some karmic justice in Hinata siccing Pride on Danzo. HA HA HA, That evil geezer wont know what hit him! :D Ed just went from screwed to UBER screwed though. :( This is gonna get ugly.
In regards to your author's note, the x-censored curses never bothered me at all. I’m dyslexic though, so that might just have to do with the way I learned to read? Maybe it’s different for other people?
As for ratings, considering some of the stuff that can be found in the M rated category, I don't know that this belongs there. I think most M rated stories are rated that way for sex, which isn't an issue with this story. Plus, rating it M will definitely make it less accessible to potential new readers since most people just browse the K-T sections. Still, I wouldn't want you to feel the need to change your story to stay in the T-level gore range. I guess just do whatever feels right to you.
| Esrath chapter 18 . 1/11
so pride is here, mmm. interesting.
| Essex chapter 18 . 1/11
Nice update. I don't think the level of violence in this fic so far would rate an M. That is usually reserved for extreme graphic gore. Everything I've seen so far would safely rate T.
| Simpleinsanity chapter 18 . 1/11
first: Yay update! so happy.
i am a bit confused on who this purple guy is, is it "god/honenheim?"
it was a bit off with the dark hair and purple eyes. Also since I have not read this story in a while. I don't quite remember all the little intricacies of the story.
| FatesShadow83 chapter 18 . 1/11
| urs-v chapter 18 . 1/11
Is it? Ling?
At first Black hair, sleepy eyes and blue shirt I tougth about the Amestrian uniform and Mustagn, would've make sens if he opened the door too. But then she activated her Byakugan and all my doubts turned true. Not him.
The only humonculus who could fit the description is Greed in Ling's body.
Envy could be a good candidate, but the guy we saw is way to formal to be Envy and he call Ed "fullmetal", instead of fullmetal shrimp.
Still an awesome and kickass fic. A must of the FMA x Naruto section.
| Yinko chapter 18 . 1/11
Hmm, really terrible. But that's mostly due to the meaningless shit that Konoha pulls, and the pathetic attitude Ed had towards helping others. Not sure if you got the second thing from canon or not, but if so then you should have left if there to rot. In the first chapters Naruto was fucking irritating as hell (when isn't he?) and yet later Ed treats him like they are actually friends of some description.
Don't bother with the "don't like, don't read" spiel. I already won't.