Reviews for Edwards Control
OliviaJane chapter 1 . 7/14/2008
What a temptress, poor poor
my bleeding tears of agony chapter 1 . 7/13/2008
win what i AM SO CONFUSED! EXPLAIN PLEASE(insert puppy dog pout and eye combo)love the story by the way
SleathyNinja chapter 1 . 7/9/2008
haha! that was great!
Ollie-Fiction2008 chapter 1 . 6/25/2008
That was really good, it was like you were in Edward's head!


1. underestimating is not the right word, it's overestimating

2. I bit my bottom lip restraining. Her eyes flash down to my (lips?) mouth noticing the movement.

I smiled as her eyes returned to mine and she began to glare determinedly. ( you used the plural [mine] so pick 1) lips or 2) my mouth)

3. I liked the reference to his soul (near the end), but didn't Stephanie Meyer make her character Edward not believe that he has a soul?

I hope these suggestions help, I loved the story.

widerhallen chapter 1 . 6/24/2008
keep up the AWESOME work with your other fics.!
ReaderDreamer chapter 1 . 6/18/2008
good one-shot!
Doris chapter 1 . 6/11/2008
This was just such a cute little one-shot!
Nope2222 chapter 1 . 6/7/2008
XD that was hilarious. BELLA WON MUAH HA HA HA HA HA HA HA

Devon chapter 1 . 5/30/2008
This is very very cute! I love it! Keep writing!
Will-You-Be-Mine-Forever chapter 1 . 5/20/2008
I love it! keep up the good work!
princessyvaine chapter 1 . 5/19/2008
AH . so cute loved it
SeeMyEvil chapter 1 . 5/19/2008
lol! Bella wins! ;)
IceVampGirl231 chapter 1 . 5/17/2008
I loved it! Teasing, flirtatious, romance. Perfect for mwah!
Sakiru Yume chapter 1 . 5/8/2008
Nice. It was pretty good. There were a few typos (I can't find them now), but other than that it was well written.
Cynthia chapter 1 . 5/8/2008

this was just too cute!
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