|Reviews for Edwards Control|
| OliviaJane chapter 1 . 7/14/2008
What a temptress, poor poor Edward...lol.
| my bleeding tears of agony chapter 1 . 7/13/2008
win what i AM SO CONFUSED! EXPLAIN PLEASE(insert puppy dog pout and eye combo)love the story by the way
| SleathyNinja chapter 1 . 7/9/2008
haha! that was great!
| Ollie-Fiction2008 chapter 1 . 6/25/2008
That was really good, it was like you were in Edward's head!
1. underestimating is not the right word, it's overestimating
2. I bit my bottom lip restraining. Her eyes flash down to my (lips?) mouth noticing the movement.
I smiled as her eyes returned to mine and she began to glare determinedly. ( you used the plural [mine] so pick 1) lips or 2) my mouth)
3. I liked the reference to his soul (near the end), but didn't Stephanie Meyer make her character Edward not believe that he has a soul?
I hope these suggestions help, I loved the story.
| widerhallen chapter 1 . 6/24/2008
keep up the AWESOME work with your other fics.!
| ReaderDreamer chapter 1 . 6/18/2008
| Doris chapter 1 . 6/11/2008
This was just such a cute little one-shot!
| Nope2222 chapter 1 . 6/7/2008
XD that was hilarious. BELLA WON MUAH HA HA HA HA HA HA HA
| Devon chapter 1 . 5/30/2008
This is very very cute! I love it! Keep writing!
| Will-You-Be-Mine-Forever chapter 1 . 5/20/2008
I love it! keep up the good work!
| princessyvaine chapter 1 . 5/19/2008
AH . so cute loved it
| SeeMyEvil chapter 1 . 5/19/2008
lol! Bella wins! ;)
| IceVampGirl231 chapter 1 . 5/17/2008
I loved it! Teasing, flirtatious, romance. Perfect for mwah!
| Sakiru Yume chapter 1 . 5/8/2008
Nice. It was pretty good. There were a few typos (I can't find them now), but other than that it was well written.
| Cynthia chapter 1 . 5/8/2008
this was just too cute!