Reviews for People Who Are Important: Book Two
cathyscloud9 chapter 26 . 9/11/2016
Glad to see an update! Yayyyyy! I loved the chapter. Thanks for writing
gaarahugger chapter 26 . 9/11/2016
I am so glad I decided to follow this story and so glad you are going to finish it! I would always come, read and re-read chapters. This chapter hit me right in the feels. Thank you for not giving it up!
Sarah chapter 25 . 5/8/2016
awesome, awesome, awesome! loved how you managed to bring out every character. haha, sai is still talking about that and sasuke and still emotionally retarded, but seems to be closer than he was before. feel bad for tenten. what about lee, kiba, shino, and chouji though? anyway, i love this story! plz continue and update!
lizyeh2000 chapter 25 . 7/18/2015
Love your story now following! . Please update soon!
Alicat712 chapter 25 . 5/28/2015
Hello, I just wanted to say how much I enjoy reading this story. I coudn't stop myself after I started and i'm really looking forward to more. I understand you have a lot to do, just give us what you can.
zZhell-butterflyZz chapter 25 . 4/16/2014
That's original and well written! I honnestly can't wait for more!
AmoraPyra chapter 25 . 2/4/2014
i just got to read this. i wanted to tell you that i loved the first story and i loved this story just as much. you did a wonderful job.
cathyscloud9 chapter 25 . 1/6/2014
wow great story, I hope you decide to update..I know with as busy life gets its hard to do. I want you appreciate your hard work and hope to read more soon.
cathyscloud9 chapter 18 . 1/5/2014
awesome, just awesome!
Colorful Assassin chapter 25 . 9/27/2013
Omg I'm so happy your back, I've reread all your stories atleast 5 times now ! You were always my favorite author on this site. I hope all is well
Olya chapter 25 . 8/23/2013
Thank you very much for continuing this awesome story. I'm happy that you didn't drop it. It's the most amazing fanfiction I've ever read. Keep up a great work. As for your situation I guess we all have our own issues in life. Sometimes it really hurts as hell when we have problems. I understand you cause I also had some problems with my parents and it was unbearable. All this misunderstanding just drove me crazy and sometimes I even wanted to die. But I guess that problems make all of us stronger and they are also our motivation to become better. Sorry for my long comment. Wish you only the best and enjoy every day. You are amazing writer and I love how you write this story with details. It's awesome. Can't wait to read the next chapter. Thank you. Take care.
AnnonaLlama chapter 1 . 4/18/2013
I wish you would update, this is such a great story
PictureMeBroken chapter 25 . 9/12/2011
DYEAAAAAAAAA. I miss this story so much. ._. I'm really glad you're going to finish it. .

Since it's the first review I've done on this story in a while, normally I would write out some long thing saying how awesome this story is and how much I laaaawv~ it, but I'm sleepy.

So pretend that I gave you the best compliments EVAR in this review.:p Lol.

Skykhanhunter chapter 25 . 9/9/2011
First off, this is a review for the entire story, which I've mostly enjoyed.

I always start off with the negatives, get them over with and then move onto the positives so here we go. I know this was previously brought up, but I do think the mixing of Japanese words with english sentances is a bad idea. I'm not talking about the names of techniques or titles or even the Japanese form of names i.e Sabaku no Gaara. What I am talking about is throwing things like the word "Baka" in after "you stupid..." It's somewhat amateurish and takes away from your overall writing in general.

Please understand that I am not opposed to Japanese used in a fic. For instance if I wanted to say "Ni he la na ghaoithe, la na scoillab" in a fic I would, but as that is an Irish proverb, then it would be acceptable. But that's not what's happening here. Japanese is a great language, I honestly believe it to be one of the nicest sounding tongues out there, along with the Romance languages and some African native languages. And of course, Irish. But at one point in your fic, Sasuke said "Gomen Nasai," to Sakura, and then followed it up with "for everything." That is disappointing. It detracts from the overall appeal of the scene, which was quite well written.

I know someone else mentioned it to you before, and I know he didn't say it in a constructive way, but I honestly feel your fic would be much better if you left out the Japanese words, but instead included something like a piece of haiku or something similar.

Of course, this is just my opinion of this area and not the final judgement of your fic overall. It's just advice, nothing more.

The second area I have a problem with is, well, canon based. Why hasn't Pain attacked yet? I didn't read your first book, for various reasons, but why is Konan dead? Getting back to Pain for a moment, from the point in the manga you've started from, why hasn't Pain invaded Konoha yet? Sasuke's beaten Itachi, Jiraiya is dead, so the next step is Pain attacking. Now, I know you mentioned that Pain is going to attack, and that Naruto is going to go and learn Sage Arts from the Toads, but it would seem that it was only a few days after learning about Jiraiya's death that Naruto left and only two weeks after that that Pain attacks Konoha. By my estimation, in your fic, several months have passed since the point where Pain should have struck. Some clarification on this matter would be greatly appreciated.

Onto the positives, and there are many more. Well written, good character development. Especially in the regions of the relationships between Sasuke, Sakura, Naruto and Hinata. I felt that the Naruto Hinata relationship was perfect;y explored, as well as sweetly developed, with a realistic approach to how Naruto really ought to have noticed her affection. Similarly, the development of Sasuke's emotions was weel thought out, well placed and above all else, not rushed. The amount of good fics which go bad because the authors rush to have Sasuke turn into a hero off the bat is foolish. Except those where he never goes mad in the first place, and there are a few of those.

I would normally be a little irritated by the fact that Ino, Kiba, Sai, Rock Lee, Chouji, Neji and Tenten got so little attention, along with their sensei's, but when viewed in perspective to the work you're doing on the others of the Konoha 12, it's understandable and even a little commendable. I know all too well what large casts can do to your writing workload.

On the whole, I have to admit, it's an impressive story. Your original character is well placed, but not too obtrusive, (some OC's can become more important than the canon characters, I'm glad to see that hasn't happened here,) your writing is good, with a nice flow to it and good use of language, your character development is exceptional and the whole section with the curse seal was fantastic. I was actually afraid Sasuke would die for a moment there before Sakura used her linked hearts technique. That was a nice touch. However, the use of Japanese words in English sentances is a little amateurish, far better to open your chapter with a haiku or something similar, and the plot needs to go somewhere in relation to established canon. Bear in mind that Pain is still Madara's strongest weapon and I assume that Kabuto is still active.

Keep up the good work, this story is entertaining and good reading. Be proud of it.

regards, Skykhanhunter
Ferrinas chapter 25 . 9/2/2011
Thank god you havent abandon them :), i check everyday on "those who are important" fanfic to see if you have updated. I am content with knowing you intend to finish them :)

Rock on! xxx
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