Reviews for The Melt
FanFicKing3245 chapter 30 . 11/21
Holy shit... I know this is old as hell, but I've gotta say, I've never seen a worse response to criticism on this site. I've never seen someone try to shift the blame off of themselves for something they wrote as much as you did. But first, let's review since you probably haven't looked at this fic in years. In this story you have a Naruto who has spent his life unable to make any choices for himself and has recently seemingly gained some anger issues because of this. A rift formed between him and the rest of his family a while ago because he finally started to get sick of everything being decided for him, yet very recently I think that rift started to mend. I say 'I think' because you never really showed this happening. You started writing about Naruto's family less and less, usually just giving them a line or two when absolutely necessary. The only reason I even think the rift was starting to mend is because you had a few lines of Naruto's parents asking him to stay home for a week, him agreeing, then a few sentences saying he enjoyed it. That's it. No discussion about the issue that caused the rift, despite a full week of them spending time together, no closure, no full scene, not even a full paragraph. Then, right after Naruto finds his deceased grandfather who he never got to make amends with, we learn that his whole family was killed and tortured off-screen. People got angry about this. This is expected. People tend to get pissed off when you kill off main characters, especially children and especially when you do so in a blatantly lazy way, but I'll come back to that in just a second. I wanna address your response. Trying to act superior, saying you're "disappointed in some of you" and lecturing us on how war works is a great way to infuriate everyone, including the people that liked the last chapter! I should know, I didn't even mind the last chapter all that much until I saw your response and decided to actually think about the last few chapters so I could write this. Fun fact, no one likes a condescending idiot. It's especially infuriating when all that "casualties happen in war" shit isn't even the reason the Sarutobi family died. Anyone with even the slightest bit of literacy competency could see that they died because you just got sick of writing them and figured, "hey, I can get rid of these characters I don't feel like writing and give the main character extra trauma at the same time, it's a win-win!" You killed them off because you got lazy, don't even try to pretend otherwise. Then comparing yourself to the writers of Gladiator is an insane ego trip. Gladiator is a film that will be studied in film schools for decades, this is a fanfic that will get blown through in a week by a few people a year, who will never think about it again. Then we have your excuse that you didn't kill Konohomaru, Orochimaru did. I'm sorry to tell you this, but you're a fanfic writer, you decide what happens in the story. When characters die, that's your decision. Orochimaru didn't suddenly become real and force you to write that. That's a really idiotic way to try and shift the blame. Finally, we have the oldest excuse in the book. The classic, "I made you feel something, so I did my job." This saying is highly overused and misunderstood. A writer does a good job when readers feel something for the characters or world they are writing. They fail when their readers/viewers feel something for the writer. A prime example is the last season of Game of Thrones. It made a lot of people feel something. That something was anger and annoyance towards the directors and writers for doing a horrible job. I don't feel anything towards the characters you've written, and I don't think anyone else who read this do either. I do, however, feel a great deal of anger towards you because your lazy writing ruined a potentially good story.
Animeworld2.0 chapter 5 . 11/3
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gryphindoros chapter 1 . 10/10
this story has so much potental and yet its all completely wasted if i were naruto id rip the seal to shreds and let kohonah perish to the fox and laugh in every single face as they passed after i did. fuck all of them NONE of them have any right to be pissed at him for any reason its helarious you made the hokage say "i will not raise this child as a weapon" and then did it anyways hope your hokage dies horribly from this story i cant keep reading, your an excellent writer but thisnone is a bad miss
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Yuzuki476 chapter 33 . 9/23
Please update this exellcent story soon.
Yuzuki476 chapter 32 . 9/23
Please update this interesting story soon.
Yuzuki476 chapter 31 . 9/23
Becareful naruto.
Yuzuki476 chapter 30 . 9/23
Poor naruto and Asuma.
Yuzuki476 chapter 29 . 9/23
Poor third hokage.
Yuzuki476 chapter 28 . 9/23
Great fight Lee.
Yuzuki476 chapter 27 . 9/23
What's wrong with kakashi behaviour its not acceptable.
Yuzuki476 chapter 26 . 9/23
Excellent job.
Yuzuki476 chapter 25 . 9/22
Wow Kyuubi really scared him good.
Yuzuki476 chapter 24 . 9/22
Excellent.
Yuzuki476 chapter 23 . 9/22
Please update this interesting story.
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