Silly Bella almost getting mugged by a man with yellow teeth. I don't know what it was but yellow teeth with cigarette smell really is a repulsive image. Good job on making a ucky villain. Bella did a good job freaking out Edward. I was thoroughly amused by her whole charade of the ladies' room and such. It was all really great. The watch was an excellent selection and I know I would have been angry at Edward too if he bought the gifts too. That girl in the shop really should get a clue.

...also I found a small error in the grammar

“I won’t object to that all at, Edward. I think it sounds like a great idea, and it has a lot of side benefits, too.

Should be "at all" in that sentence. Right near the bottom of the chapter. Should be easy to spot...if you want to change it. I loved this chapter a lot.

aww Edward is so insecure to think that Bella was going to run out screaming when she saw his picture. A very nice story with Dali I must say. He saved his life! Sounds like Eddie. Lovely chapter.

That was pretty cool. The smack down of the bob cat was pretty epic. The discussion about the funds was pretty interesting too. Favorite part was the tracking device. That was really humorous. Thanks again for writing this lovely tale of Eddie and Belly!

Wonderful honesty. Their relationship seems that much stronger now that they've discussed these things. I am so happy that Edward is happy now. Great chapter.

Please, please, please post more! This is one of the best, if not THE BEST, Twilight fan fics that I've read. I've enjoyed seeing the different directions you've taken the characters but everything is still believable. Your writing is fantastic, I couldn't stop reading I was so into the story. Please update/finish the story. Thanks for creating such a wonderful story!

"The seabirds continued to soar and dive as we sat on the cliff overlooking the Pacific Ocean, the sky a hazy gray, making the churning water look dark and cold. There was no one on the beach and it was easy to imagine we were the only two people left in the world, an ideal situation as far as I was concerned."

It's such a lovely image you portray there. I can just imagine the way the air tastes and the way it would feel to be in that moment. Lovely.

"It was almost a full time job, but as I tried to reassure her, she was worth it"

I feel bad for him having to struggle so hard to take care of her. I wish it was easier on him. You portray his struggle very accurately.

"If there was ever a time in the future that she was tempted by human blood, if I saw her about to attack and knew that I was unable to stop her, I would get to that person first and sink my teeth into them before she could. That way she would never have to feel responsible for killing someone. I would make her believe that I lost control before she could."

He's always so selfless! I can't believe sometimes how he would do anything for her. But It's so like him to think that. Yes.

"We could lie in bed and not have to worry about Charlie unexpectedly coming into my room. We could be completely peaceful and relaxed without hearing Emmett shouting at Jasper, or Alice bounding in with some new purchase she wanted to show me. I loved Edward’s family, but it was difficult to be alone and uninterrupted there."

I can totally relate to that. Wanting to be away from it all with a lover. They're so lucky 3

"Amidst the stillness of the evergreen forest we could hear the soft murmur of a flock of quail nearby. Edward took off his backpack and spread a blanket on a patch of wild grass thick with blue, yellow and red wildflowers. Just then a bird at the top of a giant redwood tree began trilling a beautiful song. “Do you know what kind of bird that is?” I asked Edward, fairly sure he would.

“It’s an evening grosbeak. The males sing almost continuously until they find a mate.”

“And then they stop trying to entertain her? Just like a man,” I said provocatively."

Really love that part. The flowers. The setting. The male singing to find a mate. Then the witty comment from Bella. Perfection!

"Edward sat on the blanket and pulled me down to sit in his lap, a carpet of wildflowers spread out around us. It was beautiful, serene, and totally private. Or so we thought. A lone chipmunk climbed to the top of a fallen log about ten feet away from us. He let out a single, high-pitched chirp and then cast an expectant look in my direction."

The chipmunk is so adorable! Finally the almonds got to be used. Such a quirky addition to the chapter.

The pushing of boundaries was especially compelling and I'm so pleased that Bella finally got a taste of the passionate Edward she is looking for. Poor Bella and her fears. I hope Edward is understanding...

Edward certainly thinks a whole lot. He's a worrier if I ever saw one. He wins the worry trophy. It was a little too much thinking for me and not enough action but I really do cherish getting to look at their thoughts. It's very enthralling.

Aw, at least he left her a present when he retreated from the bathroom. Poor Bella couldn't resist crying again.

Aw, their relationship is just too too sweet. Reading about them from your perspective is lovely. I'm glad Edward finally got some relief, I feel for him. He is being tortured by that little vixen. Lovely writing. 3

I can only imagine how rejected she must feel always throwing herself at Edward and him not even responding remotely like she'd like. I feel bad for Bella. Great chapter though. Very teenage conspirator versus Vampire Watchman.

She's so convincing at trying to encourage him to ravish her. Very amusing Bella banter with Edward. Very believable. Loved it.

Sounds like a cute little place. I would feel really strange being in such a rustic environment though, this world we live in being so high-tech and all. I really love your work! You show great insight into the characters and how they think. Favorite part of this chapter was the unicorn bit. Really amusing. Thanks for a great story this far.

I loved this entire story and I really hope that you're going to continue it... I'm sorry I didn't leave many reviews, but I was always so eager to get to the next chapter :). Please, please update soon, because I can see that it's been over a year since you updated for the last time...

Your story is very good. It's nice to get a little background on B&E.

The Thompson Twins song was an excellent choice. Don't know if you have any Psychedelic Furs or Kajagoogoo in here, but I love new wave.

My favorite line: "And your lips; if I start talking about your lips we will never get out of here." I really loved that one, and this chapter was so romantic :).