Reviews for The story of Uzumaki Naruto |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Please update a sequel to it or continue it because it is a great story |
![]() ![]() ![]() so this fic is really great and I remember I stopped reading it once and after re reading 27 chapters I was wondering why then I looked at your page and saw that there isn't a sequel and this only ends at the end of his training trip yeah that's why I stopped reading it I hate reading a great story that dosnt really end and then theres no sequel |
![]() ![]() ![]() kill the pink thing kill the pink thing kill the pink thing I hear that in elmer fuds voice every time I see sakura unfortunately you've made her somewhat bearable. I also really don't like hinata as a character she has nothing in common with Naruto and they pair her up with him out of no where well it seems like its out of no where theres that huge gap at the end of the series. I like your pairing much better cause it actually seems possible its why I enjoy this fic so much we need more anko Naruto on this site or maybe some kurenai. the only girl his age in konoha worth anything is yakumo |
![]() ![]() ![]() I kinda wanted to see the stalker suffer with her heart break |
![]() ![]() ![]() you absolutely have to continue the story, if you don't I think I might die! |
![]() ![]() \(._.)/ yay. I'm glad naruto knows about his parents. |
![]() ![]() ![]() yeah completely refusing to train to control kyuubi chakra is retarded. what would he do if he looses control when someone close to him dies or something. saying may be later is one thing, but saying never and i will never go back on that is plain stupid. anyways all the best with thr the fic |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lovely story it should definitely be continued |
![]() ![]() ![]() While i love this idea and this story, I find myself being pushed out of the story. And I know why, its very easy to fall into the habit of "telling the story well" and while this form of writing is effective it also does a good job of not sucking a reader in. What i think you need to ask your self is in what areas of my story can i afford toShow the story well" many fanfiction writers fall into this telling habit. and i reckon its because its already been shown. We already know what Everything is supposed to look like. But fanfiction is where people can change the way the original story is told and by showing us how you changed the story and not Telling us how. im sure it will be so much easier to get absorbed into the world u created. I hope I helped, Happy writing |
![]() ![]() I'm rolling with you. You definitely changed some things but if I didn't like that I wouldn't read fan fiction. One thing that I would have liked to see though were more parts where Anko showed her sadistic mask so it was clear that only naruto and Kurenai saw the real her. |
![]() ![]() ![]() well that was awesome shame it's over though or is it |
![]() ![]() ![]() well i really enjoyed that chapter a nice battle some infiltration some flirting what's not to like who wouldn't be jealous wonder what happens when Konoha finds out about what Naruto and Jiraiya did Sasuke would probably cry like a baby if he heard |
![]() ![]() ![]() well this was nice chapter and quite interesting |
![]() ![]() ![]() well this was a cool chapter the fight scene reminded me of Resident Evil fighting Lickers lol |
![]() ![]() ![]() well although this wasn't very action packed it was enjoyable plus it's good to hear about Minato it was funny i also loved the Naruto stealing all the girls part and Jiraiya sulking it just cracks me up when i read stuff like that |