There are few fan-fics I will take the time to write a review for. Yours is one of my favorites. I will continue to read as long as you write...even if AnkoxNaruto grosses me out. I could see her changing and becoming "motherly" or even "sisterly", but a 24yo and a 13yo just feels wrong...maybe I am just reading too mcu into it.

You like solid reviews, so I will try and deliver one.

First and best point, you stick to a schedule and update without problems, bless you... You will have made me a fan for life if you keep it up.

The added dialog is a plus and you manage to do it well and it does make your story so much better.

Your fight scenes are also great I really enjoyed reading them, short and concise while being clear and easy to follow. Most people, myself included, convolute fight scenes with so much clutter and you manage to avoid that. I do wonder if your actual study of unarmed combat has helped you in this endeavor. In any case, well done.

You mention cliches appearing in the Harry Potter fanfiction and I hate to say I have noticed them in Naruto FF as well, however you do not possess them and that makes this a great original work.

My negative is you seem to sometimes overstate and repeat things. Kind of like hitting a nail a few times after it is already in place. It shows up in a few places, I noticed it once in a conversation and the other time was when you had the thoughts of Sarutobi, Iruka and Hideki. However at least you over do in this rather than under and make the story short, better to have too much than not enough.

I would also like to address the idea of over powering Naruto and say that I don't think you have. You in fact are balancing it right now with the statement that he needs experience. This is quite true. Now I compare it to this, you have given Naruto a gun but he only knows to point it at something and pull the trigger. A true master knows better, I have trained in guns and can tell you that just giving me the weapon is nothing next to using it. So I don't think you have done any super Naruto. Given him the tools but he still needs to learn to use them 'efficiently' and in the best possible ways.

Well, I could go on and on but I will end it here. Thank you for writing this story, I look forward to more and I enjoy seeing how much your writing has improved in just these seven chapters and anticipate how much better it will become later. Enjoy and good luck,

Final Sleeper

A realy great story!

Could you pls let Naruto invent something agains the Sharingan..

Say after Naruto saw that Sasuke copied some moves from Lee.. it could be a special seal or a jutsu.

It would be very funny to see a frustrating Sasuke who cannot copy anything! :)

pls keep up the good work!

I have read several Naruto stories that are very similar to this. So I am not going to congratulate you on your "orginality".

nice so when is naruto and ankos relashiopn ship going to start evoveling . next chappy or after wave b4 chunin exams

I love this story you just don't see many Naruto gets help stories at all.

Question is this a Anko/Naruto relationship pairing story, or is this a Anko mentors Naruto story?

If it is a she mentors Naruto does that mean a pairing is something that is open to happen down the line with some other Girl?

If so pair him with Hinata she just is to cute and kind for anyone else!

Just what is Anko's age in the story anyway?

living with will be green wit envy. hope he kicks zabuzas ass

I have to wonder, what would team 8 be doing in the wave country. R you just going to give that mission to team 8 or do something special. (insert evil laugh). The story is progressing nicely a few minor grammer mistakes here and there. Also, just wondering when the NaruAnko fluff will pick up? Whatever happens don't give up, and as long as you update I don't care when.

"There's no I in TEAM." "Yeah well there's no U in TEAM either. So if I'm not on the team and You're not on the team. NOBODY'S ON THE TEAM!"

Un yeah enjoyed that chapter alot wasn't super flashy or nothing but the quality was great, looking foward to the next.

great story :)

great story, look forward to your next update, and I really appriciate the info on when next chap is up.

Hey Dreetje :). I read your newest chapter. I'm glad that you weren't offended by my review and PM. Some authors do take offense even though I'm an honest, but fair reviewer. with that said, we get into this chapter.

I've noticed that you're taking much more of an effort to add emotions in the story. Believe me, it's very important. But it still needs work. You still have a habit of making a character saying a paragraph worth of words in their dialogue instead of just breaking it down and adding more feeling to what they are saying. Here's an alternative to one of your dialogue bits.

"Anko-sensei...?" Naruto called out softly.

"Hmm...?" Anko said as she put her fork down.

"I just wanted to thank you for last night." The blond ninja said as a small blush crept up on his face.

"Don't worry about it Naruto. I'm honored that you wanted me there last night." The jonin told her with her trademark smile. "Are you all right now?" She asked with concern.

"Yeah. I feel much better now that I know the truth about my parents. I always wondered if they had abandoned me. But now that I know who they were and what they did for me, it makes me feel so much better. Though I wish they were here, having your shoulder to cry on means a lot to me." He replied honestly in a gentle voice.

See how it flows and brings out the emotion? You need to do that more often. Other than that, good chapter. I look forward to your response to both of my reviews. Later :).

I like it! :D

it very well writin

keep up the good work

good opening..managed to make the old intro interesting

nice chapter...are planning for naruto and anko to get together?