this is not bad

it might sound a little better with more talking and thoughts from people

I have to admit I really enjoyed reading about Naruto and Anko I find it odd that simply keeping it NarutoxAnkocentric for a chapter made it so good, I also enjoy reading from Anko's point of view and her thoughts as a person and I honestly can't wait for the next chapter... Keep writing please (DEATH TO ORANGE JUMPSUITS!)

very nice chapter can't wait till next week

I really like your fic so far. .n_n. .looking forward to your next chapter hehe.

Awesome chapter keep up the good work and update soon!

i like it

yay yay!i found a new cool story!i can't wait for the next update!oh and you're gonna detail the training process right?YES!i love reading about it...heheh.i don't like it when authors skip the whole training process and naruto gets miraculously strong just after a statement that says "3 years later"...irritates the hell out of me.

keep it up, whats next i need to know!

Looks very interesting, please add more soon!

A very awesome fic and this is your first fic too. Looking forward to the 4th chapter.

This is a good story please keep updating.

i noticed genjutsu was left off the training list. any reason for that? i mean i dont think naruto has the patience or attitude for genjutsu but he should atleast know how to recognize one and disable them, not being able to do so would be a HUGE disadvantage that someone trying to become a Kage shouldnt have. and what about the basics of fuuinjutsu? he should easily be able to fit everyting into his training schedule because Kage Bunshin help one learn everything faster except for Taijutsu since nothing physical seems to transfer over and thats something that the original can focus on while his Bunshins do everything else. anyways id like to see where you take this so please update soon

-The Don

P.S. i hope you dont pull some crap like team 7's third team member dies so it opens up a spot for Naruto to be on the team or somethin crappy like that. it would be better to have him join an already existing team from a previous graduating class that has lost a member or a team where someone decides not to take the exam and so instead of screwing the whole team over they just bring Naruto in to take it with them.

please update soon

Yep.

This review falls under the category of "flame".

Ok. I dont want to say this, but the first two chapters suck ass. I will admit they are just garbage.

Lets look at it more closely? kk?

1. is there a reason for describing Naruto/Mizuki incident? The first half of that chapter was just copy from Manga/Anime and paste in your fic. Was there actually a reason to do that besides amplifying the "volume"? Or do you truly belive that you are the first to actually describe what happened in canon? I am sure, that 90% of people who are familiar with Naruto universe just skiped that part because they've read that thousands of times. And there is no wish to read it once again.

2. The second part of the first chapter suck even more. You totaly scrued Naruto personality. You didn't yet change the canon so his reactions should be similar to the canon (At least my logic says so...) And what do we have? We get a Naruto who say's things like :

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“Ji-chan, can I ask you a question? About what happened?” Naruto shyly tried to ask."

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Shyly? Ok... I must have missed something. When did Naruto was shy? He is ANYTHING but.

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"I was so sad every time somebody hurt me. If I had known maybe I would have understood it a little better?"

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FFS! Try to put yourself in his place. Would YOU say something dumb like that? If you say "Yes" then you can stop reading this review - you are hopeless.

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"Would they be proud of me?”

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The same comment as above. This is part of psycology. The way you constructed this phrase suggest that Naruto's true wish was not to learn what his parents think of him, but to hear Sandaime say a nice sweet lie. This short line shows that he is insecure and just wish pity from the old man and not the answer to the question if his parents would be pround of him.

3. Lets moove to chapter 2? Are you still with me?

I must admit, that I've read only the first three paragraphs and could not force myself any further.

You know... There is a plague in Harry Potter fanfics. Every 15 year old kid who gets a PC and starts writing a fanfic ALLWAY makes a chapter or devotes half of his/her stroy to the main character visiting Diagon alley and buying a magical trunk, spare wand, lots of new clothes (Insert black pants and a new short)... I can understand that. Honestly. I can imagine every kid would go on a shoping rampage in a magical alley if he had lots of money.

You've raped Naruto's universe in the same way... What is the point of describing HOW Naruto is going to buy things? This was the point you tried to bring up when you were thinking of creating your fic? To show us how a kid is choosing a pair of pants?

I have not read that far in the second chapter, but I can bet you 20$ that you made him buy weights. Am I right? Can you please seat back in your chair and think for a moment. Just for a moment, ok? - Imagine a millitary society which is run by professional assassins. They devote there life to serving their Kage. They train constanly to improve themselve, because any possible shortcut to power equals their life on a battlefield. Now. How many ninja's in Konoha use weights? Can you answer that? During Chuunin exam Kakashi stated that weight training is an outdated and old fashioned way. And most shinobi use chakra to augment there body to improve their speed, strength and pain resistance.

Weights are good if you are a Taijutsu freak OR cant mold Chakra like Lee cant. Are you trying to make Naruto a Taijutsu God?

You decided to make him !Super, but should/t there be a limit?

Conclusion:

I opened this fic because of a nice summary. A nice idea - of WHAT would happen if Naruto would not be in any team at all... I guess you figured how I feel about it right now.

To be honest, I must admit that I am curious - How long will you last with this story after you devote 20 chapters to describe how Naruto turned to be a Super uber shinobi in 6 months. How will you change the canon? hm...

I had so many ideas and things that I didnt liked whe I've reasd your fic. Yet I hardly can make myself write any further.

If you have any comment or if you just wish to write to me that you hate me, then send me a PM. It would be funny:)

I wish you luck with your fic and hope you hget lots of devoted fans who will love your piece of art.

With best regards,

Ksai

well this will probably sound arrogant (cause it is heh) i've read probably around a 50% of the fics so far on here maybe more...bout seven hundred where worthy enough to be put as FAV's and this ones going in...its just got so much god damm potential...anyway only one question...is this Naru/Anko? (*best pairing of all time) or something else...just curious