Reviews for Addicted
xxxemiko.itooshixxx chapter 10 . 3/26/2011
That was wonderful! Good job!
NinjaSheik chapter 10 . 7/15/2009
S.Zix chapter 10 . 5/13/2009
As predicted, a review! Not that exciting, but hopefully worth reading (the review I mean, not the fiction).

My biggest problem with this as a whole is probably the random gear switch in feel between Chapter 5 and 6. I agree that it was too easy, but there's just a continuity error because the whole thing hinges on one phone call and suddenly there is massive bitterness. I think it might be helpful (if you ever go back and play with this again), to put more build up there.

That said, I really love two original aspects of the plot here. One is the idea of Vincent being relatively progressive and positive to start getting a new girl and all, and two, the idea that all Vincent and Yuffie shippers don't have to hate Lucrecia. Yuffie seems to appreciate her here, which is really an interesting take.

Now the form. I think you had an interesting deal going on here with the difference in eye colors being a tell-tale sign between Vincent and Galian. It would have been kind of cool to see that played throughout. You could do something with the colors in certain areas when Vincent is grouchy/not grouchy, and that would be an interesting reversal of normal ideas about the colors in question and a way to set the mood. That could even help with the focus switch half way through. Totally random observation, but I liked the idea that that was the tip off in that scene and thought you might be able to run with it.

There was a lot of raw emotion I think in 8 and 9 where Yuffie goes to see Vincent, and then later in Vincent's head, and I think the word choice there was pretty exciting. I liked the glass and the images in the mansion when Yuffie's world fell apart seeing him with Juno, etc., Great call there.

Again, a suggestion to pull that through.

And last, I'm going to get nit-picky about the last chapter because I feel like it was a bit repetitive with the fluff. The 'l' word gets said a lot, and I feel like you could have done other things there.

Overall though, I really enjoyed this. I thought it was unique and interesting, and totally worth the time I spent reading it (while lurking and then reading it again just now to give a review).

Thanks for writing!

As an additional note, good job on the OC. Those are hard to do well in a fanfiction setting without arousing groans.
Sorceress Fujin chapter 10 . 12/26/2008
I cannot believe its over! *crys* Absolutely wonderful ending - wish I could have reviewed (and emailed you back) sooner. Wow, was x-mas busy!

Youhaveabadconnection chapter 10 . 12/26/2008

That was beyond amazing! if you did like you threatened in the first chapter and take this down...i will send evil plot bunnies of destruction to haunt you! This was beautifully written; i just love your writing style!
Valentine'sNinja chapter 10 . 12/25/2008
Aww, I LOVE happy endings and this one suited your story perfectly. I seriously loved this story from the very beginning and though I'm sad it's over, you did an awesome job with the whole thing. You have a way with words, especially in the more intimate scenes, that just made this story one of my favorites. Thank you so much for saying I inspired you, since it goes both ways. You're a great writer and a great person. See you around and hopefully this wont be your last VinceYuffie fic? Talk to you later and have a great week!

NuklearWaffles chapter 10 . 12/24/2008
I have to say that was quite a story you told. I can't for the life of me understand why you bash it so much in your comments. Seeing such a unique spin on one of my favorite game characters was refreshing. So you get a big theoretical internet high five from me!
kiralover44 chapter 10 . 12/23/2008
Omg such a good ending chapter. They find love.
Star Anise chapter 10 . 12/23/2008
What can I say? This chapter was wonderful... a brilliant sense of closure, a very befitting parallel run with their first 'relation' in chapters 2 and 3 with that wonderful sprinkling of dry, desperate humour... I fully agree with Tifa's philosophy (H.P book 7 makes fine examples!). The dialogue is very poetic, and I really do love your lemon style as you balance action and emotion with beautiful language. I was a little puzzled at first at the stable scene at first as I got the impression that the sex would take place there, which seemed a bit of an anomaly... then I figured it when they moved. Nice to know Jezebel wasn't forgotten!

Thankyou for the credits! Trust me, for stories like yours, it's great to be a constant! I'll try and get some more of my own up soon...
Star Anise chapter 9 . 12/16/2008
Holy crud, that chapter had the force of an express train... Poor Vince must have felt like a tennis ball! But I have to say it is definitely in my top ten for intensity and passion, as well as how well it was written... it ties with, if not at least beats, Ch 7 of 'Oxygen' for those credits. Can't wait for the finale!
Valentine'sNinja chapter 9 . 12/16/2008
This chapter was nicely written, even when you say you spent a long time on it. The whole nightmare scene was very descriptive and I felt Vince's regret and sadness. In other words, it was great. I can't wait to read the ending, since I love fluff just as much as angst, so hopefully we'll read it soon. Have a great week and I'll talk to you later.

CupofTeaforAliceandHatter chapter 9 . 12/16/2008
So glad their back together. A shame there's only one chapter left. Well I hope you plan to write other Yuffentine's. I like your writing style.
Sorceress Fujin chapter 9 . 12/16/2008
Excellent! A suggestion...? Hmm, whatever could I say... instead of fluff pure smut smut smut? Mwhaha! Looking forward to some fluff actually. Cannot believe this story is almost over!
Sorceress Fujin chapter 8 . 12/12/2008
I have three words: MORE MORE MORE! I absolutely LOVED this chapter. Must have more. Very very anxious!
MoeMoeKyunn chapter 8 . 12/8/2008
what it do Aveira!

interesting chapter.

this chapter was definitely darker.

i like the twists that you put into it.

also like how the title does fit the "mood" in this chapter. i figured that it had something to do with sin. although i don't know anything about latin the spanish word for sin is pecado so it's similar. idk, if that made any sense... if you understood it great if not, oh well... _"

spelling and grammar wise, i didn't find mistakes.

wonder if yuffie will find vincent, or vice versa.

can't wait for the next chapter. ]

keep up the great work! D
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