|Reviews for Livewire|
| swiftrabbit chapter 6 . 10/2/2008
I've found that I like all your fics even though this is a first for reviews. I'm not much of a critic so I'll just ask one thing and leave it at that.
Is Naruto some kind of reincarnation of Dan? Using a technique only used in passed wars(possibly Dan since he fought and died in one), Dreaming of a Blonde with brown eyes(Dan loving Tsunade), while wanting to be Hokage(Dan again). If not, I'll still be looking forward to your fics either way. Later!
| Meh chapter 6 . 9/21/2008
I'm thoroughly confused as to how your Naruto is going to gain any amount of speed by just running and jumping. It's impossible for him to gain speed by doing that as he doesn't have any resistance to strain his muscles thus build them up. All it could do is help with agility and reflexes. So Kakashi should be giving him weights, he has trained with Gai for a large amount of time so he'd know how training in speed is important.
And why does everyone always stress control for Naruto? He has the raw power and chakra capacity that control should be on the back burner as he has enough to waste three times as much on jutsu than needed and still outlast a kage in a jutsu throwing match.
Also how is Kakashi so stupid as to not know ordering Naruto to buy new EVERYTHING with his limited paycheck and what not and still have enough for food, rent, and all around living expenses for two people? He'd know Sasugay doesn't have that problem as he'd have the Uchiha clan money, and Sakura is living at home so all her mission money is money to burn.
Also the comment on the Hokage not being able to do anything to help Naruto is ridiculous. He's the Hokage his word is law, Konoha is a dictatorship
| Meh chapter 4 . 9/21/2008
Good till the end with Sasuke the fag boy. He can't surpass Itachi, Itachi was Anbu Captain at 13. Sasuke the fag boy is 13 and barely at best mid Chuunin. And only reason he beat Itachi in the manga with all the likely drug enhancements from Orochimaru and the jutsu just thrown at him and stuff, is because Itachi toyed with him pushing him to his limit and not killing him so he could rid him of Orochimaru along with dying of a disease and over three quarters blind. He could have ended Sasuke the fag boy at any moment, he just chose not to. So your Sasgay with only Kakashi's training could never hope to beat Itachi unless he waited till Itachi went completely blind then he's got a 50/50 shot.
| SpeeDemon chapter 6 . 9/16/2008
Well I cant wait for the next chapter.
| Anal Sewage chapter 6 . 9/13/2008
| asdf chapter 6 . 9/7/2008
The only problem I can find is that some of the characters, like naruto, would be using more contractions... for example, "...you will help too..." might be "...you'll help too..", but I might be reading your emphasizations incorrectly. You do have a tendency in your stories to use the adverb "owlishly" a bit much though... otherwise, I love yo' work.
| The Librarian's Assistant chapter 6 . 9/1/2008
crazy good story!
| Golden Arms chapter 6 . 8/18/2008
It seems pretty cool, though I do wonder what exactly is going on with Naruto suddenly learning wire-fu. For what it's worth, I think in terms of movies, and this is a pretty slow-moving one. For the most part, I would stick with more story surrounding the mystery of Naruto getting so good and gloss over the teamwork structure if it doesn't propel the story along. Otherwise, it's a bit like baiting and switching.
| Bassclone13 chapter 6 . 8/17/2008
Wow, this story isn't bad at all. I love the Naruto and Haku parts of it and sometimes how Sasuke is learning, I know Sharingan isn't all powerful but I'd still like to see more action out of it. And for some reason, I just don't like how Sakura is. At all. I don't really have any idea why though, I'm sorry to say.
It's not because your a bad writer, not at all. Your very awesome, haha. It's probably because I've always HATED how any chick in any manga/anime is some violent bitch (And when I say bitch, I don't mean it at Sakura or anything, just how pretty much I see it.) who puts down a character who's nicer than Hell or beats the crap outta him for nothing. Love Hina's Naru, Negima!'s Asuna (Doesn't really hit the main character, but is just a bit mean and put down overall in my opinion), and Sakura from Naruto all reminds me of this. And to see Sakura get way more powerful and still have that attitude? I want to punch something. Again, it's not you, it's me, haha. I'll most likely be hesitant from this story for a little while or possibly ever. It's still great though
On a later note, right when Naruto started using his wires I instantly thought of Walter from Hellsing. And that made the story more awesome. xD
| Smokey.Blade chapter 6 . 8/17/2008
Man this story has so much EPIC WIN it makes my eyes bleed while i read it!
Seriously man this story is great, i'm a little disgruntled that it has not been updated for awhile but i will keep checking up on it periodically.
I'll be looking forward to future chapters, keep up the awesome work!
| King Hawke chapter 6 . 8/15/2008
I almost pity team 7, if I didn't think they could handle it. I very much like that you turned Sasuke into something other than a homocidal emo, and you turned Sakura into a useful teammember for a change. I Really like the wires! that is awesome on how they are able to use them so well. keep up the good work! I look forward to reading more of this story.
| crewger chan chapter 6 . 8/14/2008
OMG, the side with Sakura and Icha Icha Paradise is so original and rich! At first, I thought you were going to bash the characters left and right, but you DIDN"T!
You're my hero o
| Tankred chapter 6 . 8/14/2008
Hmm, this looks like it could become a totally sweet Naruto/Haku fic. Which is saying a lot coming from me, as I generally dislike those, but the potential in this one is simply overwhelming.
| R.O.S chapter 2 . 8/10/2008
...Why do I suddenly think Naruto is the reincarnation of Dan?
| HolyKnight5 chapter 1 . 8/9/2008
Any hope for a future update with this masterpiece?