Reviews for Don't Leave Her
Xx julie xX chapter 1 . 2/17/2008
First of: cute story! dylans part...he is cute...ok i am

oh yeah secondly...i read a story where someone used nearly the same lines as you did in the fight scene...i dunno i just wanted to let you know...

best wishes, Xx julie xX
SkyChasm chapter 1 . 2/17/2008
Beautiful story! Well-written! Although I do have a few pointers about the appendicitis thing:

a. No one dies of Appendicitis. It's a very minor case in which very minor surgery takes place.

b. The appendix doesn't burst right away. You just feel a pang of pain in the right side of your stomach. But it MAY burst when it's not taken care of in time. But in Zac's case, it shouldn't burst because he was taken directly to surgery.

c. After having an appendectomy, you usually sleep for only 3-4 hours, and not for an entire day.

d. After surgery, you will feel enormous pain and it would be quite impossible for you to move. So Vanessa hugging Zac when he woke up could have SURELY hurt him.

Well, that's all. These information were personally taken from my personal experience. Believe me, it ain't easy having Appendicitis. Other than that, great job!

-Wildcat From the Heart
minixoxmya chapter 1 . 2/17/2008
aw i loved it! I liked how yours was different hehe xx
awillowdeeplyscarred chapter 1 . 2/16/2008
that was nice!
kkairi325 chapter 1 . 2/16/2008
Aw...that was so cute!Great job!I loved the ending!
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