|Reviews for Earth|
| FearandLoathingXIX chapter 1 . 9/10/2010
[23:54:21] Steph Straz: I'm reading Lafic
[23:54:26] Steph Straz: It's like listening to music
[23:54:27] Steph Straz: IN WORDS
[23:54:36] Sylla: ... Yunno, it really is
[23:54:45] Steph Straz: Exactly
[23:54:48] Steph Straz: It REALLY is
This is soooooo great! I still cannot express enough how much I love your writing style. BIG LOVES TALK TO YOU SOON! XXX
| TJWasNotHere chapter 3 . 7/24/2010
It's readily apparent why anyone would be at a loss as to what to say in response to these little stories. They are that gorgeous.
I wonder what "Parallels" and "Children" must have been like originally for you to think of them as juvenile and embarrassing, because I would say if that were true, then you've done a LOT of cleaning up, because these versions are not in the least juvenile or embarrassing.
For the love of God and all that is good, continue this series. ...Unless you get published, I suppose. Haha... I mean, you have incredible, enviable talent...
YOU A BEASSSTT. xD
| Igor Lollipop chapter 2 . 6/24/2010
First off, just let me say how much I enjoyed these first two one-shots. It's Aurikku, but not in the in your face way that so many people do. It's subtle and really, really nice.
And, in addition to that, I love your writing style. The way you wrote these is so natural and... I don't know. I just really like it. :D
| Jasper.Fangirl chapter 1 . 5/24/2010
This is incredible. I like it so much that I am at a loss for what more to say.
| TwiliPrincess049 chapter 2 . 4/25/2010
Chapter 2 was slightly different, in a way. It was nice, because you didn't feel the need to explain everything, and I could just float on through the writing. You did an amazing job keeping Rikku Rikku, but also letting her grow a bit.
I don't know, but there's just something I love about this story. It's peaceful, to get all metaphorical. It's great writing, and beautifully constructed into a little thing that I can just take in quickly, instead of having to ponder everything you say.
Great job! Keep writing, please!
| TwiliPrincess049 chapter 1 . 4/25/2010
(I’m reviewing for the first chapter only, by the way, but you’ll probably get another review from me when I have the time to finish reading)
It takes a lot in a story to make me outwardly smile, but I’m not sure I would describe that as a story. That, I might describe as poetry. It was beautiful imagery, and I loved the little changes in the phrase “children are the world. The world is made of children.”
You didn’t make anyone OOC at all, and I even felt I might be able to better understand Rikku and her childishness. I loved how she gave Auron the bead: that might have turned out very, very badly in terms if being in-character on Auron’s part. You were walking a thin line there, but you balanced it all perfectly.
The story you told was perfect as well, especially the end. Great job ;)
| serenbach chapter 3 . 4/23/2010
I really like the idea of the arranged marriage between Seymore and Rikku- and Auron's reaction to it. I loved the whole atmosphere of their talk by the fire. Really enjoyed this. :)
| Amorissy chapter 3 . 4/22/2010
This is beautiful and lonely and sad. Crickets and pyreflies and water, it's natural and it flows nicely. I love the scene you set as much as the conversation that takes place.
(I'm hopelessly addicted to Auron/Rikku fics now, so hopefully there is more from you soon!)
| Youko-Kokuryuuha chapter 3 . 4/22/2010
I always love what you write, La, but something about this one seems a little different, and not in a bad way, too.
I noticed a few typos, though (or at least what I *think* are typos): this bit-“Auron sometimes has to rub his limbs to stop the numbness escalate to rigor mortis”-reads odd because of escalate’s conjugation; and this bit—“Auron fishes for his jug for a gulp gulp to swallow”-but I could see that being stylistically La. And that’s about all I found wrong with it.
Now, onto the good stuffs.
I loved the imagery, of course; you always do well on that front. I’m kinda/maybe/slightly/a little jealous of how you’re able to paint so much with so little. Being concise is something I think you’re already pretty badass at.
There’s little to say on characterization: you always outdo yourself there. I like how Rikku opens up to solemn, stable Auron through a series of contradictions that don’t seem to really make any sense at first-it helps make the Seymour revelation more poignant, I think, the one thing that stands out among many ramblings.
(Gawd, that bastard child bit really swung hard with its candor, I tell ya.)
I just really loved the overall theme of reflection and regret, really, and the what-ofs and the what-could-have-beens. Definitely added a character dynamic rarely explored in Aurriku.
Also, I liked the crickets. D
| Amorissy chapter 2 . 4/21/2010
I really enjoyed this, I love the grittiness of your Rikku. This line, particularly, was amazing:
(Tell you a secret. I picked the scab off again and again until it scarred because that's my favorite part of me, and I feel better knowing it's there.)
| M0onage-Daydream chapter 1 . 9/15/2008
I loved it. Thank you for this insightful theory on Rikku's personality. I'm proud to say this fic made me cry.
| Bonzai1990 chapter 1 . 6/30/2008
heh heh heh so appropriate! ya got an ad for beads at the end of this story!
I love your story! I have reread this one a few times... and I have to say... this one is my favourite!
I want to live by Rikku's philosophy! I never saw it in Her perspective, but I believe that there is always hope! No matter what situation your in... you always have to have hope... even if there is nothing left ya got have hope... I like Rikku's philosophy a lot better then mine though!
"Children are the World
And the World is Made of Children"
I will strive to live by that!
P.S. - I am not a freak honest! Although I seem to act like one... and hate being the Mature one of Everyone... Even though I am the most childish! This story just hit home for me... and I do really enjoy it (I am not obsessive or obsessed!)
| CrissCrossedHaiku chapter 1 . 6/16/2008
Guh that just totally made my day. Wonderful work, absolutely brilliant job with this.
| greiverwings chapter 1 . 4/22/2008
Simply beautiful - I very much enjoyed reading one of the only Aurikku stories that wasn't terribly depressing. I really like both the way you write and the layered meaning behind it, and I implore you to keep writing, no matter what it is, because you have a beautiful storytelling voice.
| Avelera chapter 1 . 4/14/2008
What a beautiful story. The rhythm was just lovely and there was such beauty in the repetition of the phrase about the children. You really gave Rikku her own perspective in life and it was very touching seeing the snapshots of Auron coming to understand it. Well done!