Your good at writing. I'm sorry but I'm feeling drunk right now so I'm just gonna write randm wordz know, thancks.

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Thanckz, I reely needed dat.

Make the title shorter, you idiot

Maybe:
-I lost my mind but found my heart
-My mind was lost but my heart found

You get the idea.
Ta, GrenolaMatchmaker

I'm trying to wrap my head around their background. I had assumed they were British. Considering they're Royals and Cambridge and all. But that's where all the British-ness of it ends. Every thing else you described sounds very American.

Wait so is Edward a prince? You said he's a Duke but he's royalty. Apparently Duke/Duchess of Cambridge is what England calls their royal family. Does that make him in line to be king?

England titles really confuse me, lol.

I love your story! I loved the unusual plot too

he threw me into the mirky water and the fish could have gobbled me up im so small...are you serious? I didn't think alice would say something so fucking stupid...I never liked alices pov and now well I just don't like her as a person..what a fucking whiny little cunt
and windscreen really? does it screen you from the wind? that makes no sense! its called a windshield because it shields your ass from the wind!
some dude tries to rape your girl and you "mess him about" LOL im not gonna mess with someone im gonna beat their ass, kick their ass, beat them up, bring the pain, rip the white off them, kill them, hurt them, but never "mess them about"

sooo that whole scene with james was total crap funny how she just pushed his chest, she has a hand right? able to make a fist? she didn't even try to hit him! and then that bit at the end OMG did she really throw her weapon? HAHAHA who fuckin does that? she was soooo pathetic do you throw your weapon at your attacker and run? or do you just kill him with it? hmmm I don't know
and that shit at the beginning Edward would never do this to me! ya bella he would never turn the lights off in a room with you in it...LOL
I hate your bella SOOOO much I want to beat her head in
oh and why was she struggling to breath? cause her ribs hurt?
and pray tell why wouldn't they just turn james in? why make up some story about falling down stairs? theres no vampire secret to hide dumbass turn his ass in...no wait don't just let him do it to someone else that makes perfect since.
and don't take her to the hospital take her home LOL Fuck that

god, I wish she'd just break up with him already hes getting fucking engaged. Bella can find someone else! BELLA AND JAKE!

I was embarrassed for the writer just now...so edweird sees bella has some condoms and omg he must think im a nympho now!
that was the stupidest sentence in the story so far and that's saying a lot.

can you lie with me I feel safe with you...lol what happened to nothing happened? or how she doesn't need anyone to protect her? now shes scared? pussy

that's the stupidest shit ive ever heard. ya ill be with you in secret for 3 months then you can marry someone else...bellas a victim! victim much whore? oh excuse me your not a whore bella your a desparate pathetic whore

so your saying he drank it and immediately was wasted huh...funny that never happens to anyone...don't you think its kinda pointless to have alice in the middle of them telling us all the ins and outs? kinda ruining the damn story! with alice doing that shit and noticing EVERYTHING your story has zero angst...sucks balls dude

he already said he liked her! why is he always questioning what he feels has he never liked a girl before? what is he 13? its fucking stupid...and I thought edweird said that jake liked bella but then he says their just friends and I bet he doesn't imagine her in her underwear...make up your fuckin mind does Jacob like bella or not?
fuckin stupid
why does that asshole edweird get so many chances? he should be cut off already...hes damn stupid and you should kill him off in the next chapter
bella and jake!

I don't get how she could like him! hes whiny and annoying and a fuckin asshole

why does the asshole in your stories always get all the attention from the opposite sex? why doesn't bella have admirers?
and she should never forgive him he can go fck himself