eh, this was alright. Quite a few spelling mistakes (or: chocking instead of choking), the relationship development is a bit meandering, but the most frustrating part was the big ol' fight scene at the end. The author does that hair pulling thing you see in the movies, where in the middle of a dangerous crisis, the characters are all arguing loudly about who goes who stays, multiple times, instead of focusing on the mission. Lord have mercy.

Excellent first chapter, I like the scene setting and then the reveal.

I very much enjoyed this fanfic. Great read!

Lovely fic! Thank you for sharing!

Ok, I looked up sorrel since you keep referencing it with regards to Hermione’s eyes, and it is a leafy green plant used in salads. Maybe you are thinking of another word, but please stop referring to Hermione’s leafy green eyes as it is just weird. LOL!

No offense, but the idea that someone could be a part time Auror while at the same time shouldering the full time responsibilities of being a boarding school Professor is ludicrous. You yourself wrote that as a first year teacher, Hermione barely had time to eat. The idea that she could do both duties is illogical. Sorry, but it is true. Illogical writing is my worst pet peeve in fan fiction, as I consider it to be lazy story telling to use an illogical plot device to move your story forward rather than seeking a solution that does not break trust with the reader’s common sense. Enough said. I’ll get off my soapbox now, and tell you that other than that minor point, I am really enjoying this story! I love the way you are developing your characters, I’m enjoying the emtional richness of Hermione’s thoughts, and the story set up is most compelling. Thank you for sharing!

very sweet overall

Lovely story!

Thrilling story, thank you!

Snape aught to know better than to go around talking out loud to himself in front of nosy portraits.

I like the delicacy of your writing, subtlety and ability to manage the harshness as well.

Very good story. Heart renching that Lucius killed Draco.

All bitchings aside, that was a wonderful story! I'd love to have seen Lucius brought to justice with Narcissa testifying against him, but oh well. (And maybe have Draco's death be faked and he comes waltzing in during the trial...)

Annnnnd then you go and murder Draco. After all that, you up and killed his poor blond ass. That was just mean. Thanks. Really. Stupid Ron. *glaring*

Oh good grief. Is there where Hermione's going with the wrist-to-forehead I'm-a-weak-fainting-flower bit or will she remember she's supposedly Hermione Granger? I mean, she doesn't even have MUDBLOOD carved into her arm so I'm not entirely sure where her character came from.

And as usual, Ron's a dumbass.