|Reviews for the one where rachael is pregnant again|
| Guest chapter 1 . 5/13
So if this sounds rude but you need to read it over. You're spelling is pretty good except the only problem I have is the capitals.
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/14/2013
BOO YOU WHORE
| seddierox13 chapter 1 . 1/29/2010
hehe... funny, last scene and the so thing. write more! xx
| mebelucy chapter 1 . 4/17/2009
| aidanadia chapter 1 . 4/21/2008
After reading your summary, I felt like shooting myself in the head. Yes, it sucks.
Your story is awful to the power of infinity. If you were going to write in script format, couldn't you have at least tried to write with captials and proper grammar? Seriously. Take a hike back into the past and learn somethign from elementary school - you'll find it helps. A LOT.
Oh, I was thinking something. If someone were suicidal, they could just leave this story behind as their suicide note.
| Champers chapter 1 . 2/21/2008
That was a little hard to follow and needed a beta reader I think ... interesting the way you included yourself in the 'script'. You are clearly a big fan and writing is always great to do, and there's certainly humour in there, but I think this may need some polish to make it coherent.