Reviews for The Truth Will Out Part 1: Traps
Caeria chapter 9 . 11/10/2013
*** "Without them the masters leaderless and there was a mute consent that they were not as tight. None the less Teela was like a daughter to each of them and they were going to do what any 'father' figure would do." ***

I really wish that they had gone off to rescue her because she was a comrade in arms and a fellow soldier and because a band of warriors don't leave their own behind rather than because she's a 'daughter'. While I'm certainly enjoying the story, that bit was a little disappointing.
squeakygirl chapter 15 . 10/6/2013
I really really like this story! please update as soon as you can! :D
supergrandefan chapter 15 . 10/1/2013
This story is really well written and very interesting. Update please!
Winterhalt chapter 15 . 9/18/2013
Please update soon. I am LOVING this!
hooked chapter 15 . 9/11/2013
Hey where did u go? Good story. Great action sequences
HazzaTL3 chapter 14 . 7/5/2013
nice battle scene. enjoyed it.
HazzaTL3 chapter 11 . 7/5/2013
nice escape. shame got caught. so close. see the longer chapter didn't happen?
HazzaTL3 chapter 10 . 7/5/2013
what dimensions are the cage? descriptions please.
HazzaTL3 chapter 9 . 7/5/2013
thats better split it in sub chapters.

just need to make each sub longer.
HazzaTL3 chapter 8 . 7/5/2013
could have added tgat as a sub chapter within the previous chapter.
HazzaTL3 chapter 7 . 7/5/2013
Seconds seemed like seconds were minutes, minutes were hours

doesn't make sense that part doesn't I'd have put

Seconds felt like minutes, minutes like hours...

7 chaters and still no action? not a bad story just short.
HazzaTL3 chapter 6 . 7/5/2013
could have described the scene that duncan/he-man was looking at. describe the fear teela felt when evil-lynn tortured her. what is whe thinking?

you've a good story but feels skeletal needs some padding out.
HazzaTL3 chapter 5 . 7/5/2013
just as I get into a chapter it ends lol.

Please write longer aim to 2,000 words per.
Emilly chapter 15 . 7/5/2013
Update as soon as you can!
eldergrayskull chapter 15 . 7/5/2013
This is story pretty interesting! What happens next?
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