|Reviews for Slouching Towards Salvation|
| Montana-Rosalie chapter 1 . 1/20/2013
This is my favorite apocalypse fic... well, second favorite, but I can't find "This is How the World Ends" here. What happened to it? Anyway, great writing, beautiful characterization, just perfection.
| Dark Roswellian Angel chapter 1 . 12/2/2009
Great story of survival. Very interesting concept.
| papergrape chapter 1 . 5/27/2008
The title caught my attention-reminded me of that last line in Yeats poem "The Second Coming." I loved the poem so I had to read this story. Very apt title considering the apocalyptic nature of the story, but your ending, was far lighter. It worked well.
I don't know where you got the inspiration for the zombies, but the circumstances reminded me so much of an episode of Sliders from way back in the day. It was terrifying.
I wondered what happened to the other transgenics-Joshua, Alec, etc? Jam Pony people are accounted for. Manticore's gone so I expect we should have met the other S2 regulars? I'm thinking too much no doubt. In the end, this is a M/L story so they're the only ones who matter :)
Those last lines, "Towards California. Towards hope." Great plug for the golden state! It's symbolized hope and a new life so many times for so many people throughout American history. Everybody wants to find hope. I'm about to get in my car...
Great writing! I plan to read some more of your stories!
| Moonlite Star chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
| Griever11 chapter 1 . 3/5/2008
YOu have no idea how much I love this. Such beautiful imagery (despite it being an apocalyptic, Armageddon-ish zombie fic). M and L were written perfectly, with them being each other's only source of hope.
This was creepy, but in such a good way (like that movie with Will Smith and the Resident Evil games). The dialogue was inch perfect. And you gotta love flamethrowers...
The bit at the end with the bullets was so... cinematic. Awesome stuff!
| Jeanetteg chapter 1 . 3/2/2008
That was scarry. Max and Logan alone? In ideal times that would be nice, but now ...
Nice job. Too bad you've finished with Logan throwing away his bullets and what about California; is it safe?
| Babyangel86 chapter 1 . 3/2/2008
I am LEGEND!
lol, i like the story :-p
| Brina chapter 1 . 3/2/2008
That was scary, but I liked it!
| Mari83 chapter 1 . 3/1/2008
I so love this, the whole dark-but-a-bit-hopeful mood, your admirable style and having something like ‘28 days later’ (with which I was fascinated) for DA.
I wouldn’t have considered it on my own, but now that you did it, it seems obvious how well a Zombie-story fits into Dark Angel. There’s the ‘world breaking down’-mood anyway after-pulse , such a virus coming from Manticore somehow is logical and Eyes Only makes a really good enunciator of Apocalypse.
He blocks most of the trip down from his memory and all he can remember is the warm touch of Max’s hand on his back and the feel of her breath on his neck. He doesn’t look down. If he did, he thinks he might have discovered exactly what dying felt like.
It’s a terrible look for her. It draws out the thinness of her face, the gaunt glint in her eyes. She looks like a scruffy little boy more than a woman. He’s not sure he’s ever loved her more.
This is one of the images in DA fiction that will stay in my head.
Logan obliges, slipping his hands underneath his smudged glasses. “I hope it’s a pony.”
Love to have this bit of humor and hope and reminiscences of favorite M/L scenes
I love all the parts describing how their relationship grown and changes and how they give each other hope, but guess those are my absolute favorites:
They’ve blurred into something different, something almost impossible to separate MaxandLogan, smashed together into one word, one person.
Logan would have liked to think they would have gotten this way eventually, reach the point where they were impossible to separate, but doubts assail him in the night. He wants to think this thing they have is about want, about love and not just about need.
“You’re all I really need,” Logan says before he can stop himself. They’re still not good with this talking. They can write volumes in subtext, in every small movement, but I love you, I need you, you’re everything. They don’t say it aloud. They don’t ever say it aloud.
I think this lingering insecurity and hesitancy to openly express their emotions is something very characteristic for them and you’ve done it so beautifully.
And of course I love the ending with the hopeful, high feeling of their escape, Logan letting go of the bullets… so beautifully worded.
| anon chapter 1 . 2/29/2008
| BlueAngel137 chapter 1 . 2/29/2008
THIS IS SO GOOD! Honestly, I wasn't sure a ZOMBIE STORY with Max and Logan could work. But it works! And how it works! :-) It's perfect! Love the pacing, love the "insane" ;-P structure, love the mood throughout the story.
-...Max is grinning as she comes into the room, he hair has started to grow back out again, not long enough to provide grip for a zombie, but long enough to cover the barcode, long enough to have bangs falling in front of her eyes. It’s a terrible look for her. It draws out the thinness of her face, the gaunt glint in her eyes. She looks like a scruffy little boy more than a woman. He’s not sure he’s ever loved her more. ... ("sigh", gotta love this one, huh?)
-...“You’re all I really need,” Logan says before he can stop himself. They’re still not good with this talking. They can write volumes in subtext, in every small movement, but I love you, I need you, you’re everything. They don’t say it aloud. They don’t ever say it aloud. ... (just perfect)
-... They’re survivors. Logan knows that much. He finds himself bobbing his head to Max’s discordant harmony and dangling an arm out the window and slowly, very slowly, he unfurls his finger and lets the pair of bullets he’s held onto since this thing began slip through his fingers and clatter down onto the pavement. ... (love the picture you draw here. :-) and I'm so happy you gave us a happy (hopeful) ending)
| latenightrain chapter 1 . 2/28/2008
What an insane concept, worthy of the pen name! Reminds me of Sean (of the Dead), of course and this crazy book called "Blindness" too. Nice job weaving the background story/lead up into the present situation. Thanks.
| dharkcharlotte chapter 1 . 2/28/2008