Reviews for What was here and what was gone |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I wanted to let you know that your story has me intrigued. I'm not sure where the story is going or even if you are going to finish it but I am enjoying it. I have a lot of questions running through my head. With regard to your writing. You have spelling and grammatical errors. I initially thought that you were a young person but then I read your bio and I realise that you may be older than I expected. If you are going to continue writing please consider getting a beta - you are in desperate need of one. I hope you continue with your writing though as you have some good ideas. |
![]() ![]() ![]() love it |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is very good, please update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this fic. I was following your other version and saving it to my computer to read when I had time, but where I left off on the updates and where this fic is at now didn't match. i was wondering what was going on. Then I saw your note about redoing it. I have to say this version is better on the character relationships. Are you going to update again soon? keep up the great work. Colonelengle |
![]() ![]() ![]() awesome story update soon |
![]() ![]() ![]() Such a great story. Hope you update soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I hope you update soon. I really wanna know whats gonna happen! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow. Great job. Catch ya on the flip side. |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh this is so good. please continue soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome. Catch ya on the flip side. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great twist on the story, having Dean taken and raised by a Demon. Having him protect the Winchesters and not know why, tracking his knowing and John's knowing is imaginative. I can't wait to see where the story goes from here. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well atleast John is figuring it out now! Awesome update! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting beginning to this story-having Dean raised by a demon sure put a spin on things. Know he knows why he felt he needed to protect the Winchesters! Now that he is remembering, I can't wait to see what he decides to do! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i like it, u should continue it. like soon. nowish. lolz. soz. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really liked what you did with the moment between Dean and Mary. That was really good. I don't think the sequence of events works really well. I really don't think John would let Dean come in the next day knowing what he is. I think John wouldn't differentiate Dean from the things he hunts and would kill him on the spot if he had the chance. I guess you would be going for a softer more settled John in this story. It got me to thinking what might work better would of been the moment between Dean and Mary first. Have her come to the garage looking for John or something. Once she makes the connection you have John come in break the moment and Dean runs off back to Missouri's. Then having the demon show up. John and Mary then would have reason to follow Dean. Than when John find out the truth. Point the gun at Dean. Dean and Sahara could do some neat demon thing and get out there. Then you can go back to Dean thinking about was Mary right or just desperate to find the boy she lost all those years ago. Even the thing Missouri said at the end fits in still. It is nice that we are starting to see what growing up in a demon family was like. I like what you did with the house fire. They forgot Dean. Bad parenting. Maybe this could renew some feelings of failure as a father. He left his boy behind, he just walked right by the door and didn't even think. There has got to be some major guilt over that. It reminds me of this movie called the Deep End of the Ocean. |