|Reviews for Flawed|
| Fortune Zyne chapter 1 . 3/24/2013
This was an interesting story! Well done!
| Oshun chapter 1 . 5/10/2008
Sorry to see the pitiful flame on this interesting and complex story. The name is well-know, however, so I presume most readers will consider the source and ignore it. I used to post all my stories at ff net, but there are poor writers, increasingly emboldened to belittle and attack other's stories by the fact that this is not a closely-monitored or supervised site. Unfortunately, they are narrow-minded, prejudiced, and spiteful without having any sense of what constitutes good writing. In addition to those who manifest rampant homophobia, there are others, as well, who attack sincere writers who seek to learn and polish their craft. The one who posted below does both.
You intrigued and kept me reading this story, despite my own tendency to prefer longer works and a more traditional, less experimental, style. I would agree with others who remarked that it is close to poetry. I intend to read more of your work, here and other places. Very nice job.
Glad to find a writer who is interested in pursuing the subject matter, i.e., what constitutes flawed and damaged under these circumstance. I am personally very much influenced by the quotation in the text: "There Maedhros in time was healed; for the fire of life was hot within him, and his strength was of the ancient world, such as those possessed who were nurtured in Valinor. His body recovered from his torment and became hale, but the shadow of his pain was in his heart," but also believe he had to have had great strength to accomplish the positive things he accomplished over the next few hundred years.
Your AU departure from the original storyline is intriguing. I am led to wonder how long the defense against Morgoth could continue without the reunification of the Noldor. Or how soon and how hard all might have fallen if Maedhros had not played the role which he did in holding the line against Morgoth at its most vunerable points. I have a feeling that if this AU were developed into a longer story, it would be a short and bitter one indeed. I am impressed with your ability to convey with great perceptiveness the love and loyalty of Fingon toward Maedhros in this short story.
| The Freindly Giant chapter 1 . 3/11/2008
Sir, you are dull and poorly written. If you cant say something nice, please say something that will help. It goes against everything this website stands for, and you should learn that constructive criticism should be the only type of criticism. This story is a fine story by a up-and-coming young author.
| The Battling Bard chapter 1 . 3/11/2008
I have to know what motivated you to write this. You've obviously read Tolkien, so do you REALLY think Maedhros and Fingon were in mad, horny love with each other? Do you think that's what Tolkien meant when he said there was love between them? If not, then why the flipping hell would you write it?
Sorry, but I don't understand how anyone who has emmersed themselves in the beauty of Tolkien legendarium, could write something like this. You obviously have no respect for Tolkien or his work.
Apart from that, this is dull and poorly written.
| CoreyPolly chapter 1 . 3/9/2008
A passionate love story, actualy, more of a poem that puts a more human face on the lofty elves of tolkin. The sadness and pain in maedhros's story is very well conveyed and is very realistic to real life torture victims. The thing, as I have said, that struck me is the realistic but touchingly romantic story of a lover nursing his love back to health. The way fingorn devotes himself completly is very well done, and the sadness he feels is palpable. All in all, an exelent short story/poem wich brings the simirilion to real life! Good job!