Reviews for Hakumei
Murderleo chapter 2 . 4/29
auuuuuu~ I wanted them to also take Temari and Kankuro, imagine what kind of shit your father will put in your head...
Vishw chapter 32 . 2/23
Another good chapter.

I'm kinda indifferent towards Yumi. I dislike this kinda thing. Like I said Itachi should have killed her. He knew she had turned psycho, he had no feelings towards her, yet he left her alive to cause trouble. And now she has Mangekyō... smh.
Vishw chapter 31 . 2/23
I thought Itachi killed Yumi. Why leave her alive to cause more trouble? Naruto could have just told Kiba that he saw Danzo killing Sandaime, that's why he left, instead of being unnecessarily evasive. And he still sucks at strategy. Still, one of the better chapters.
Vishw chapter 28 . 2/23
How on earth is Konohamaru running around without any protection or supervision during a freaking invasion?! I'd think someone from Kinen would keep watch over Sandaime's legacy.
Vishw chapter 27 . 2/23
Naruto sure sucks in this story. Getting his ass handed by a filler character. Why didn't he use Rasengan or Summons or Shadow Clone army?! Why doesn't he know any Wind jutsu?!
Vishw chapter 20 . 2/22
Why is Naruto still oblivious to Hinata despite being raised by one greatest medics and one super pervert for half his life?! Also, Sakura suddenly crushing on Sasuke when she hasn't shown much interest in him before this, feels rather forced. Some inklings like Hinata's would have been better.
Vishw chapter 18 . 2/22
Five years under Jiraiya and yet this Naruto is worse than the original at handling Kyuubi. It also seems he hasn't learned anything more than the original learned within a couple of months under Jiraiya. What the heck were they doing for five years? Hope he shows more skill in the tournament.

Same with Gaara's seal. Why hasn't Jiraiya fixed it and made it more stable?!
Vishw chapter 2 . 2/21
Another great chapter but one problematic thing I felt was that considering Hinata was almost kidnapped when she was younger and Neji's father died because of that, there is no way she or Neji would quietly agree to split up, especially after Naruto mentioned kidnapping.
Vishw chapter 1 . 2/21
What an intriguing start!
Child of Dreams chapter 6 . 1/15
What did you do to my Shisui?
Ashera fanfics chapter 4 . 11/9/2023
I know this is old but I wanted to precise that Kimimaro is implied to be able to take down the ninjas Kiri has sent to deal with the Kaguya clan. He's the only survivor after all, meaning that whatever age he was when the battle happened, he was already a beast before getting any formal training.

This explains how he could be so OP at 15 when he looked like he was crushing flies in the Sasuke rescue mission including during his entire fight with Gaara. I think he didn't realize how weakened he was compared with his usual performance, considering Kabuto's statement that he was paralyzed from head to toe and only moving on sheet willpower, probably using dead bone pulse to force his body to move.

When we have endgame knowledge about where the ability comes from, it becomes more believable that the Kaguya clan would be feared if there was a dead bone pulse user among them. An adult, trained dead bone pulse user would be invulnerable to almost every shinobi in the verse without learning anything else than how to use their ability. With standard chûnin techniques, they would be total gods among supersoldiers.
yourfoxydope chapter 2 . 7/29/2023
cringe sorry
I understand that authors are usually not the smartest people about another world, but YOU DON'T FUCKING LET YOUR NUCLEAR WEAPONS RUN IN ANOTHER COUNTRY.
pokemontcg808 chapter 19 . 6/13/2023
I didn’t think of this sooner but Team Kekkei Genkai is more like Team-KEK-They-All-Die (in the official series). I just got a feeling Orochimaru is gonna slaughter them so Sasuke could activate his mangekyou (ever since I read this fanfic where a fodder teammate was killed off as a plot point for Sasuke to awaken his MS…). Of course these characters are probably going to stay to the end to match the Akatsuki at least.
hitsdifferent chapter 28 . 5/24/2023
if you want to abuse him a little then put someone who could really fight gai realistically
hitsdifferent chapter 27 . 5/24/2023
please gaibaki
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